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Color Me All Over Your Body. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. 
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We sat in a circle, spoke about what we thought of each other. I concentrated on you, starlit girl in the corner. You concentrated on your paper, I guess that's fair, I'm not beautiful. I said you were, well, I stuttered. I can't remember what I said, but I was looking right at you. You said if I were a crayon, I'd be forest green. _____________________________________ The Sadie Series. I couldn't help it: But I promise that Sadie's series is fin, at least as it's own entity. -P Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. [This message has been edited by viking_metal (01-31-2009 07:57 PM).] |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Paul, This has a great last line. I like the title a lot too. Good write. Bobby |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thanks a lot Bobby- Your opinion means a lot to me. -P |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Well that was a great package of poetry. Good thing there was room for one more in the series. I really like this.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thanks Larry- good to have a new reader.  Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Real good work....You get a lot across with these concise love poems..... Eric |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thanks Ethome. I like to think so as well. Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Forest green, oh, solid, earthy green that is perch and lift off beneath stars and bluebird wings... sparkling write! |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thank you very much. Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
viking_metal - what a great touching romantic write, liked this one a lot... BC |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thank you sir! I'm glad you thought so. Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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Boshii2 Member
since 2009-02-01
Posts 146 |
a melted green crayon a beautiful melted green crayon. you and your poetry are like a welcome breath of warmed air of the Wadi Rum. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thanks a lot Boshii- You're from Jordan? Cool, man. Real cool!  -P Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
you are amazing...question: do you ever share these poems with the women who inspire them? i would totally melt if I was immortalized in your prose : ) ~I am the keeper of what he cast off~ |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Actually, I gave her the entire series. She told me she was seeing someone else, "sort of." -P Everyone deserves to be loved, even you. |
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