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Open Poetry #44

Endless Love

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

0 posted 2009-01-25 04:35 AM

Endless Love

My loving Child "I miss you"
Every second you are gone; "I cry"
With endless love I left you sleeping
The time we said goodbye,

As your eyes closed for the last time
You took with you half of my heart
One day we will be together
As it was right from the start,

Until the day I join you
And once again we stand side by side
My loving child I will miss you
Every second you are gone "I will cry"

Annie.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2009-01-26 06:04 PM

Fine writing...James

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

2 posted 2009-01-26 07:57 PM

Awwww Thank you James,

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

3 posted 2009-01-26 08:57 PM

Yo dear Annie,

I'm sorry to hear that. You'll be together before you know it.

The poem is well written, and effective.

Love Bobby

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

4 posted 2009-01-27 08:09 AM

Its very sad on the heart through the pretty combination of its words

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

5 posted 2009-01-27 09:57 AM

Thank you both for your feedback

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

6 posted 2009-01-27 01:06 PM

such a heart-tug of longing this one portrays...a fine element of beautiful writing...nice...nicely done

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

7 posted 2009-01-27 05:46 PM

Thank you

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