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My Morphine
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My Morphine |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
Someone once said to leave what I do love; That it will return if sent from above. Black is his heart, cold is his sorry soul. Midnight engraves his heart with a huge hole. I must have been crazed and insane to take Such a fool’s wasteful poor advice for truth My love please forgive me, I have moaned long Painful tears burning my cheeks falling down A burden I bore, now take me back dear I miss your laugh and touch. I need you here. With you life is gentle, easy, no strife. Delicate sweet love, you are my whole life. Without you I am poisoned, dead, forsaken. Be the morphine for my hearts righteous achin’. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
 You misunderstood the advice. If you love it, let it go. If the love is real, it will return. Don't leave it, unless you're the one who needs the space, and then if you come back you won't feel trapped. You'll feel free to love. Which, obviously, you do. I like the 'morphine' metaphor. I like the way you write a short poem, but you don't give any evidence of leaving anything necessary out. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I agree with Pilgrimage... excellent metaphor! *S* |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
GothicCherry - A wise lover will recognize that to err is a human thing common to all lovers. But to march forward together with a forgiving hand over the stumbling blocks and past the setbacks injects an antibody that's divine and let's you know that the morphine has worked. Love your poetic craft here. Namyh |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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