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Passing In The Night
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Passing In The Night |
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turtle Senior Member
since 2009-01-23
Posts 548Harbor 
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As I rolled off a cresting sea And smartly sped along my way; I thought I saw a fleeting glint. A hint at end of day. A Distant vessel passed me by, She swayed upon the wind and sea. Far off I saw her masthead light That swung by night to lee. I glimpsed in hope, a moment there, To know the cant that set her dance, But darkness overcame my glee For meeting we might chance. Perhaps we'd passed by light of day On jaunty waves in tipped salute? I'd surely known the sum incurred That spurred her to this route. Does she not know I'd tarried close In empty sea by way of steer? I pondered as she passed me by If she knew I was near. If we sould pass this way again On pleasured wave in knowing meet, I hope she shares a greeting true And thinks it too a treat. Turtle |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Some people paint on the shells of turtles... you need no such adornment. This is lovely. and yanno what? I'm no expert--but I do believe it scans!  Welcome to Pip! |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
 Salute! I hope she comes back by your patch of ocean sometime soon. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
...very rhythmic...very melodic...like a song of the sea...methinks this one is best read aloud...nicely done |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
turtle - has a musical tone to it when read. Nice write... BC |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
What a beautiful concept, a turtle bonding with a sea vessel! I LOVE it. I couldn't make out whether it was a ship or a boat, but I don't think ships have masts (but what do I know, a landlubber), but as long as Turtle recognises it when he/she next sees it, that is the main thing - but was trying to get my visuals accurate. Hope to read more from you. Welcome to Pip, to a turtle from an owl Owl |
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woodtic Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 87 |
Very nice! |
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turtle Senior Member
since 2009-01-23
Posts 548Harbor |
Thank you all for commenting and the warm welcome. Serenity: Who paints on turtle shells? The cads! lol! Pilgrimage: Alas, a patch of sea is as elusive as life itself. Steavenr: Yes and a good vision of this ballad's intent. BC & woodtic: Thank you. Owl: I think I like your comments the most. A turtle bonding with a sea vessel is hilarious and unexpected. I love it! I also never gave consideration to the fact that I didn't describe the ships passing in the night. I didn't think it relavent, but indeed, it would be to the reader. turtle |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I've heard that sea turtles can get confused by lights in the darkness. It seems you've stayed on course here. Nicely done, turtly one.. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Turtle, thank you for the explanation. Now that I know it was a ship, I've got my visuals in line. I am sure that the ship was so delighted to be communicated with by a turtle that it will most certainly be looking out for its turtle friend the next time it passes that way. I am an animal lover par excellence - all those that ever walked, swam, hopped, slithered, flew and anything-elsed the planet - they are all so much easier to understand than most humans. There are many humans I like too. Owl [This message has been edited by OwlSA (02-05-2009 12:14 PM).] |
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