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To Not Compromise [A Terzanelle, inspired by Serenity]
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To Not Compromise [A Terzanelle, inspired by Serenity] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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To Not Compromise To not compromise what my dream meant and not to whisper of emotional desires oh, this elusive search for one’s content kindles and fuels these raging fires for again and again these dreams seem bent (and not to whisper of emotional desires) damn, but my soul feels torn and rent though I gather these shivering slices of soul for again and again these dreams seem bent to stream my consciousness to one place where I might see your loving face though I gather these shivering slices of soul and try with difficulty not to feel old; to not compromise what my dream meant where I might see your loving face oh, this elusive search for one’s content. . © krj 1-22-09 Inspirational piece: /pip/Forum29/HTML/002338.html |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Lovely format, Karilea. I have never, to the best of my recollections, met a terzanelle, but I enjoyed my encounter with yours. Some time later, I will look up what its rules are - obviously stanzas of 3 lines, and a fascinating rhyme scheme, but I am not sure if there are variations on the rhyme scheme, and if there are other rules. Delightful poem, too. It had me very curious to unwrap the mysteries in it. I enjoy your fascination with dreams. It enhances my fascination with them. Owl |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Sunshine, With a little work, this could be turned into a proper Elizabethan sonnet. It's okay as it is. Love Bobby |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You managed to capture the "serenity" I feel when I glimpse The Other Side. I'm so glad that it's translating for others, and that you so beautifully made this ...more. (And waving at Owl! I didn't mean to neglect you on that other thread, either. When I was remembering that dream, I did indeed think, "I just HAVE to tell Diana about this'n!".) way cool, you two.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I love this form, Sissie...it seems especially well-used within the diaphanous quality of dreams. The meaning within a dream seems to be so simple, while dreaming, but elusive indeed, awake.  |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Happy giggles, Karen! Thank you for that. I am glad that you saw it was just up my street! Or rather just into my forestful of creatures - saw my genet friend coming down his/her tree a few nights ago - and my houseful of Tigger and Daisy - and my heartful of Flicka and other darlings who have gone to Heaven and are there with him. And it wasn't just the andibles, although it was especially them. Smiles. Owl |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is superb, Sunshiney One... I loved it before reading the inspiration... afterwards, I was a bit in awe. *S* |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Don't compromise! Don't compromise! Keep the beauty of the dream forever. It will soothe your weary soul with fresh positiveness every day. Clever enjoyable words Karilea. Eric |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
lovely words in a stunning format... |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Dear Karilea, You are the sun in my sky. My nickname used to be lonedreamer. This was a wonder! Richy  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
 Sunshine, I do so admire your rays of solar ink.  Love & Solar Light, Linda |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Beautiful Karilea, just beautiful, Thanks for sharing. Love to you dear lady. Lindsay |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Dear Sunshine, This is wonderful. Beautiful writing - and you have such style. Alison |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
This is beautiful, Karilea. I have always admired the way you write. |
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