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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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I have watched her eyes in the random those glances she does when angry moving her clouds around in a closet sky like she was sorting for throw aways and wished my freedom was hanging too within her grasp but out of her reach but instead the storms of another highway have bowed my heart full of metal arrows that leave sparks on the sides of her curves when jaunty copper leans bare her bosom and tears my leathering in switchback blades that click metallic moans before they throttle threading dreaded love from a widow's needle ________________ daark (owg-ish for the Hiway 1) |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
the whole thing moves me but i think this is my favorite part smooches "moving her clouds around in a closet sky like she was sorting for throw aways and wished my freedom was hanging too within her grasp but out of her reach" |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms slick.. you would like her..her paint is almost the color of your hair..thanks ms |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: I have learned to interprete your highway language too, I think. And it is pure high level poetry. Quite simply amazing. Love, Margherita  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
it is always difficult to single out one phrase in your writes (they are ALL so good), but I'll bite: "within her grasp but out of her reach" ...just love this...stretches the mind |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar, thanks lady friend for your lovely touch ________________ steavenr..thanks amigo...you did select the core of the poem.. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed the Write Dark!  ARCTIC WIND |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks AW |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much! *S* I read it several times, trying to pick my favorite part... but I couldn't leave anything out! *S* |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks suthern...am glad you kept it all... |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
She must be a beauty to share such freedom with you and inspire the words that you share. A |
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americangothic Junior Member
since 2008-11-11
Posts 45 |
great flow and imagery |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san, thanks so much babe for the touch _____________ americanG, thanks for the read |
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