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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2009-05-29 01:56 AM


Quiet
hands are mending,
while my head breathes
calmly on the sheets.
The cool fabric of memory..
And for long moments I wonder
if words still hold meaning
if they've yet to be spoken...

Within me I am aging,
rings formation in my soul,
counting the days until I
can be green leaves again and
sway in the breeze of longing.

For no matter which way I've gone,
the songs have always rung the same tune,
forlorn and lost in echoes,
stars weeping in the sky, melting,
always lost in night.

And though I throw
pennies in each well,
wishing for something more,
it only brings
such expected disappointment,
a feeling I force my body
to embrace.

Quiet
hands are mending,
while I touch the air around me,
and replay the scenes
again and again,
a never ending
silence.


© Copyright 2009 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
2islander2
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1 posted 2009-05-29 03:41 AM


a delightful read, i have been impressed by the beauty of images and the sentiments you shared...an impressive work.
yann

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2009-05-29 07:10 AM


ms k..the things we do with quiet, like licking the bowl after mixing it to bake some noise..enjoyed it little one
serenity blaze
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3 posted 2009-05-29 07:17 AM


"if words still hold meaning
if they've yet to be spoken..."

nodding

I think they hold more meaning, while they are being formed and refined in the mind.

*smile*

I offer your poem as proof. (I could have highlighed the all of you)

Midnitesun
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Gaia
4 posted 2009-05-29 08:58 AM


"And for long moments I wonder
if words still hold meaning
if they've yet to be spoken..."
Brilliant truth, Meghan.
You are an incredibly gifted poet with a deep heart and fine mind.

Osprey
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5 posted 2009-05-29 09:13 AM


Your talent strokes the page with a gentle melancholy. Here's to full leaves and a sway in the breeze.
Chalmette Guy
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6 posted 2009-05-29 09:18 AM


Every poem of yours is a gem to read.
It seems you can do every style of poem well too.
Can't wait to read the next one.

Bloodline
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7 posted 2009-05-29 09:47 AM


A solace for spirit and soul
comes on the quiet tone of
thought, if we will pause and listen
to it's song, beautifully sighed,

Bloodline

Margherita
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Eternity
8 posted 2009-05-29 01:00 PM


quote:
counting the days until I
can be green leaves again and
sway in the breeze of longing.



Awesome. You are a very enticing wordsmith.

Love,
Margherita

Rex
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9 posted 2009-05-29 01:10 PM


Loving and touching expressions. Well done and enjoyed.

Regards.

SlowlyFallAway
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10 posted 2009-05-29 05:04 PM


"For no matter which way I've gone,
the songs have always rung the same tune,
forlorn and lost in echoes,
stars weeping in the sky, melting,
always lost in night."

Being lost is a journey I would never trade for the world.

Good write.

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
11 posted 2009-05-29 05:10 PM


Dear Kaoru~

You have a beautiful mind, and such a magnificent vocabulary
in which you convey your feelings so exquisitely.

Sadly beautiful it is,  I could feel the threads  
unraveling by this poetic heart tugging write you wrote.


Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
12 posted 2009-05-29 05:11 PM


Kaoru - I believe this is the first writing I've read of yours, and find it excellent. Waiting to see more...

BC

Marchmadness
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13 posted 2009-05-30 02:09 AM


You have a unique talent, Kaoru.
                            Ida

Honeybunch
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14 posted 2009-05-30 05:11 AM


Yes, ditto to everyone's comments.  Too busy rewinding your words in my brain to come up with anything unique.  Excellent write!

Helen

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15 posted 2009-05-30 03:39 PM


You are exquisite K.
I love the bend and curve of your lines, and sit up straighter each time you speak.

H

JamesMichael
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16 posted 2009-05-31 02:03 AM


Fine writing...James
Shadow Angel
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17 posted 2009-05-31 07:30 AM




~  Hiya Kaoru...

I'm new here, and I'm so glad I came in here tonight.

quote:
And for long moments I wonder
if words still hold meaning
if they've yet to be spoken...


I absolutely love this poem, the quoted lines, especially...there's a delicate veil of melancholy that clings to your words and I love that

I am looking forward to reading more from your pen, my friend

*hugs*

Sasha xx

Robert E. Jordan
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18 posted 2009-05-31 12:51 PM


Yo dear Kaoru,

The thoughts expressed in this poem are very good.

Love Bobby

Heart2Heart
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19 posted 2009-05-31 01:53 PM


Tranquil words to soothe.  I did enjoy this fine poem.
Heart2Heart

viking_metal
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20 posted 2009-05-31 03:21 PM


You are simply friggin' aweshum.

Everyone deserves to be loved, even you.

ctowen
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Green Mountains of VT
21 posted 2009-06-01 02:53 PM


though hands are mending, I am found deeply touched here by you

         ..... another peek into YOU and you look simply MARVELOUS!!

   Craig

  

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