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The Sound of Night
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The Sound of Night |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Sound of Night Dusk drew her mark around the harbor with the sound of a band down-wind, hot and filled with drum of blues it pulsed down the path where boats drew down, lapped and quietly stilled. I was drawn toward the pulse of evening and light in a patio where a German Shepherd waited at the door to a tiny bar and dance floor, music satiated. Inside the rhythm of bodies swayed as dancers felt the blues, the blues, the blues so torched my casual eyes drew pictures of another sort. I sat and watched the day die down out the opening of the sultry door where the guitar played with a voice begging me to stay and sway. When the set was done and somber silence filled the men who had been dancing I suddenly saw Nam as they quieted with memory and gin. They stood in silhouette against the stage hand to heart as the band played and their voices rose in song, The National Anthem so strummed and sung tears were in the words I heard. Dusk drew her mark around the harbor where water lapped a reverent goodbye and tears were in my eyes. ------------- Rewrite from a time ago [This message has been edited by Martie (05-25-2009 07:52 PM).] |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well I can't imagine how you can make anything you wrote better, but this was glorious. The images were vivid Martie. Carpe' Diem, |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
Yes beautiful. The online Guardian Poetry Workshop theme for this month is "night" - you might think about submitting this. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Exquisite! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms martie...it is always a blessing to see your lovely pen.. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Very special! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is beautiful, Sissie. Only you could pull such tender reminisce from the night skies...  |
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Misty Lilacs Senior Member
since 2005-11-15
Posts 1060White Birch Forest |
This is an incredible write and I saw every image of every word. You are an amazing poet and I so enjoy reading your poems despite not commenting very often. Thank you for this. ooxx Marti ________________________ |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
A very beautiful poem of 'The Sound Of Night'. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You captivate the most gentle sighs, and create such a vivid picture. Only you can write such a bittersweet beauty and stir the feelings that run deep. Always a pleasure, Martie~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Martie, your sound of night has mingled with mine, through the emotions your spectacular words conveyed. There are certain tunes, like a National Anthem, that can't be listened to in the hour of sunset without bringing tears ... Wonderful work! Love, Margherita |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
you know I like the night. enjoyed the poem very much. |
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Osprey Member
since 2009-04-12
Posts 249 |
How do we empathize? I don't know. Once: Paint It Black' was just a great, Stones, song to me, but it moved on. |
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Heart2Heart Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738Scotland/Norway |
A truly beautifully penned picture poem and a treat to read. Heart2Heart |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - good to read your writing again. And I must say it as well done as ever. When you wrote of the blues and that guitar, it just touched me... BC |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A pleasure to read...James |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"I was drawn toward the pulse of evening and light in a patio where a German Shepherd waited at the door to a tiny bar and dance floor, music satiated." I could see all that you wrote in my mind. Quite a fantastic write and I loved it. |
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Bloodline Member
since 2009-05-23
Posts 236Oklahoma |
Sounds bring vivid memories and make that moment into new, enjoyed, Bloodline |
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