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Open Poetry #44

Haiku? is this it?

tfaye
Junior Member

since 2008-12-18

Posts 33

0 posted 2009-01-12 10:10 PM

Pieces of heaven
Fall like golden confetti
Where’s my catcher’s mitt?

T?

Marc-Andre
Senior Member

since 2008-12-07

Posts 501

1 posted 2009-01-12 10:17 PM

Yep, this is a haiku indeed, and well-crafted too. The first two lines set the topic, the third one a response or predicate. Nicely done. Mark

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

2 posted 2009-01-12 10:41 PM

Yo Tfaye,

Well, you're close. However, what you've written is more of a Senryu, which is based more on human interactions.

Haiku involves only the natural world with no human intervention.

Bobby

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

3 posted 2009-01-12 11:00 PM

tfaye - I'm not sure, but nice write...

BC

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