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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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Fighting you quiet like lightening, for I haven't the words. So easily you speak of the lies that bind the day, as you thrust through the branches like a wisp of air while I struggle. I rise with the steam of your tunnel, growing weary of the distance still bondage, and you say that it is merely because I am silent that I am chained. So I see her hands create the Earth on which you stand, and I wonder if my chemicals are enough to disrupt a signal and make my own, stable enough to hold you softly and better than her bones. And not knowing if a secluded voice is enough to calm your waving limbs. Giving you a taste to see if it is fine enough to persuade you to stay or come closer so that I can breathe your warm. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow...  loved this, but I really do love the way you write! |
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collins613 Junior Member
since 2009-05-08
Posts 15NYC, NY |
I acutely feel the pain she fees. Reading this makes me want to offer comfort in some way. Her vulnerability is breathtaking. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
bending the wind around your fingers I wonder if you close your eyes when you touch freedom... I enjoyed your barefoot climb here ms K |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This such sensual angst, megs...  (and yes, I do write a lot of bad ones--as I told a friend, I write kinda like Babe Ruth used to swing a bat--he struck out more than he hit home runs...um, I think.) But you are totally captivating.  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
An intriguingly sensuous write, conveying deep longing mixed with a touch of self-doubt, that of course has no reason to be. Love, Margherita |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
This line: "...it is merely because I am silent that I am chained" I was disappointed that no one else pointed it out because it's so profound...that isn't a subjective opinion, it's a fact.. wonderful piece of brilliance. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Whew...mesmerized by the words you write. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I ran through a gamut of emotions while reading your impassioned words!  Linda |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
you make writing seem so easy, combined with your nature of words....this should make anyone wanna be a better writer, it does for me...hugssss ~~**~~ |
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Osprey Member
since 2009-04-12
Posts 249 |
'So I see her hands create the Earth on which you stand, and I wonder if my chemicals are enough to disrupt a signal and make my own, stable enough to hold you softly and better than her bones' You are some poet. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
K~ I can only echo the others, hun. You are crazy talented, with an effortless flow that I can only envy. H |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This is a keeper. A |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
I create the earth and call it water with rocks. I read everything you post, mademoiselle, even if I don't say anything about it. I particularly enjoyed this piece. You da bomb. -P Everyone deserves to be loved, even you. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
your talent is just so over the top you make me gasp for air |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
a battle of warmth in tongue of a true Poetess am here to echo the the resound of your incredible words! Ct |
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Bloodline Member
since 2009-05-23
Posts 236Oklahoma |
The words carry signals and markers of an inner being that is very much aware, Bloodline |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Meghan, this is pure poetry, unadulterated emotion flowing in a stream of heart-beat imagery. |
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