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Open Poetry #44

The price to pay

TheAnonDavid
Member

since 2008-08-28

Posts 237
UK

0 posted 2009-05-17 06:13 AM

I sat and watched her as she slept,
Her skin so ghostly white.
I saw as dark'ning shadows crept,
Escaping from the light.

The deathly Angel spread his wings
To take her soul away
As Heaven's choirs plucked gentle strings
In random disarray.

I watched her as her movement ceased;
Her body lay so still
As if the Angel had released
All suffering and ill.

At last I cried, my voice returned,
"Please stop, don't take her now."
The Angel looked, so unconcerned,
With boredom on his brow.

I knew that with the Saviour's grace
My plea could be allowed.
My tears were wet upon my face,
I pleaded long and loud.

"Kill me," I sighed, "Kill me instead,
And I will take her place."
The Angel said, "But she is dead,
Look down upon her face."

"Her soul is free from sin and pure
But yours is dark and black.
Your words are childish, immature,
Why should I bring her back?"

The Angel's words were straight and true
But still I forced my plea.
Though he refused I tried anew
He must not disagree.

At last he smiled and held my eye;
"Your wish is in my hand;
I have decided to comply
But you must understand;

"Your life is ended as we speak
And she will live once more.
The tears have dried now on your cheek-
So let us count the score.

"You cannot take the vacant place
In Heaven where she'll dwell;
For you are doomed from now to face
Eternity in Hell."

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2009-05-17 06:57 AM

For God's sake no, dear David!!! An Angel would never ever condemn you to eternal hell for such an act of love!

We must be careful for what we wish, no doubt! This is a very well written piece, but I firmly disagree with the cold shower conclusion.

Love,
Margherita

SlowlyFallAway
Member

since 2008-08-29

Posts 279
North Carolina

2 posted 2009-05-18 09:12 AM

"The Angel looked, so unconcerned,
With boredom on his brow"

I like that analogy of death... it doesn't seem to 'feel' or take anything into consideration.

Awesome.

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