Open Poetry #44 |
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Quiet of the Morning |
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Johan Member
since 2009-05-13
Posts 88Lincolnshire, England U.K. |
As the mist swirls in the valleys And drifts across the fields The ghostly shadows harden And the ancient oaks appear Old oaks with giant branches And waists that spans their years Stand proudly dripping water From mist as though of tears In a gentle silent clearing Between these ancient trees Stands a broken fallen cottage Gnarled red ivy round the eves In the quiet silence of the morning Before the wakening of the birds The sound across the clearing Is the tap, tap tap of water Dripping down from sodden leaves. |
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Marcia MT Junior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 36California USA |
What a beautiful poem Johan. It's so visual which is one of the hallmarks of a great write. I look forward to reading more of your poetry and welcome to the blue rooms of PIP. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
welcome to PiP...kept trying to find the one part of this I liked best, but that was not possible, for I would have had to copy the entire write...I liked it all...it shows the beauty of the language you used to describe it...nicely done... |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Johan, Try to avoid starting lines with "and". Bobby |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
beautiful share, I can feel the atmosphere and the place...great work. yann |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
A lovely description, Andrew. M |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Gorgeous pastoral imagery, Johan, and a little ghost-like because of the time element and old cottage. I'm reminded of old log cabins I've seen in the woods of Oregon, only broken remants of yesteryear. Sometimes stone fireplace are about all of them that linger. This is a lovely poem. ![]() |
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