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SeraphimBroken Member
since 2009-03-09
Posts 74USA |
Crowded coated liquor glazed pavement, worn feet immersed in masses of flesh-print. I, walking with you hand in fist, amidst the smoke and mire of side streets humanity. Smog like smiles, glancing across the corners, of dream paved streets, drowning under foot. Smell of their desires, decaying below, You look at me with eyes, deep with their gray. Holding fist tighter, I assure you of their passive, "fear is but in your heart pounding." "This is not our walking road of treading, were only here to pass through, remember?" Worried grimace upon your brow, your words rimming upon my anticipation of our passage. "What if this street has no end?" "Are we already at destination of ourselves?" I turn, pull up your chin... "We will need to wear shoes..." |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo SeraphimBroken, I've lived my life on the street, and I don't understand this at all. I'd try for more simplicity. Bobby |
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SlowlyFallAway Member
since 2008-08-29
Posts 279North Carolina |
It's not about living on the streets. It's about walking the one of life's many roads. Good write. |
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SeraphimBroken Member
since 2009-03-09
Posts 74USA |
Bobby; It was basically using a few memories of going through a depressed area of town, remembering the feelings it provoked, and then another situation in a relationship, where the feelings were the same and just combined them. It's not about the streets themselves, but perhaps the hopelessness in humanity and in a relationship struggling to survive through problems.  Thank you for pointing that out, I should have posted an explanation along with this one. SlowlyFallAway; True, one of life's many roads I have found myself and my loved one walking together. Hopefully... I don't have to find a pair of shoes lol. Thank you so much for the read |
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