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Taking the Time
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Taking the Time |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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I waited an hour in the car, while another rainstorm flooded the earth, trying to get up enough courage and composure, before calling to have him open the door if company was wanted or needed. I left a message on an answering machine... allowing him time to decide. Then, I saw him today spending five hours of worrisome feelings, as he spoke in gasped whispers and told of a dizziness that had me on the phone. He looked very thin, beautifully bald but carrying a loneliness in his shoulders every time he tilted his head back to get a better breath of air. Needing more than nourishment from a feeding tube, we spent needed time elsewhere, being hydrated for an hour or so, as I listened to the calming of each breath. It will be five years come June and I dread the thought that he may join her sooner than any of us wish, having learned of this himself only five weeks before. Home again, he joked about taking me out to dinner. When I asked what would he do when there he said "just watch me eat." Always a sense of humor, no matter the situation. And before I left he had a picture taken of us by my Godson, his youngest and made sure that while sharing a goodbye hug, he would give me that brother-in-law signature of his: a pat on the ...... that would always make me blush. M "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." (Will Moss) |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Geez, Maureen, that's sad, but so beautifully worded as only you can do. I truly love your way of telling a story, even as sad as this one is. Your words just keep hanging in ones mind. Love, Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
very effectively emotive 'slice of real life' write... well done! MUCH applause !! |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
(: Juju |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Nakdthoughts, This is nice and peaceful. Thank heavens for Godchildren, I have a bunch of them. By the way, I almost killed my Brother-in-law for doing that to my wife. The Brother-in-law and I got over it though. He died a long time ago. We were always good friends, and I still miss the guy. Your poem brought back memories. Love Bobby [This message has been edited by Robert E. Jordan (05-08-2009 12:30 AM).] |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
So touching and heartfelt Hope |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Maureen, this is o sad, but beautifully written. I understand thos eblushing times. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Life is so fragile and fleeting, the losses so hard to bear. You've expressed it beautifully, Maureen. (((HUGS))) |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
such a poignant remembrance of a fragile occurrence (with a whole lot of different emotions)...thank you for sharing this special time |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
touching and sweetly emotional, thanks for the write best wishes yann |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
You stripped it down to the core. This write is beautiful because it is full of love. |
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Spuddette Member
since 2008-07-03
Posts 112England |
I guess he'd eaten already!! Good lord this is right to it Girl. Good for you for doing this. Oh! Were we all to be so ... to it. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
carrying a loneliness in his shoulders every time he tilted his head back to get a better breath of air. This goes straight to my heart... well done, my friend. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
M - Life is sometimes so hard to bear but then there is the love (and the pat) to stay with you always. My heart goes out to you and yours! Helen |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you for "taking the time" to respond. This is all so sudden and David, my Brother-in-law, was taken to the hospital the next day as they try to decide the best way to ease his breathing, possibly a tracheotomy in a day or two. All we want is for him to be able to breathe easier, no matter the time that is left. Thanks again, M |
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