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She Bled
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She Bled |
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Osprey Member
since 2009-04-12
Posts 249 |
She Bled From solitary tower Behind the mask of lies Seeking solace with sullen trees That knew of his demise He trembled as he touched them Asked them for her mind His eyes, they haunted yesterday His guilt feigned dumb and blind "Tell me trees, before I venture From betrayal's keep Does she know? Can she tell? Have I stole' her sleep?" The trees they bowed and turned away And in a clearing he Saw fruits of seeds that he had sown With crass, cult perfidy For there she bled, as time stood down Upon the stone of years And all around the nettles bloomed Watered by her tears. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You are rapidly becoming one of my favorites to read. This is an intriguing write. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Outstanding |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
For there she bled, as time stood down Upon the stone of years And all around the nettles bloomed Watered by her tears. Osprey, that beautiful Stanza has the touch of the Master's hand, top accollades for that lovely post, much enjoyed. Lindsay |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I really like this piece |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
For there she bled, as time stood down Upon the stone of years And all around the nettles bloomed Watered by her tears. a wonderful piece, great read and very enjoyable sharing. yann |
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Raindance Member
since 2009-02-07
Posts 120West Coast |
This is a masterpiece! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear Osprey, you certainly have a 'talon' for writing! Everything about this poem is remarkable!  EA |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Beautiful work. =) |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
enjoyed it much oz, some poeish byron with santana playing in the background |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Yes, I too feel that this is an exceptional write. Love, Margherita |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Osprey, This is a very interesting poem. I rather liked it. Love Bobby |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Totally awesome. I have trouble with scansion, so I can't compliment you on that and know what I'm talking about, but I do know that this read beautifully aloud. Lyrically enchanting--I very much enjoyed this.  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
For there she bled, as time stood down Upon the stone of years And all around the nettles bloomed Watered by her tears. This is wonderful... especially the last verse! *S* |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Excellent - I loved all of it, but especially the sullen trees. I am so glad that I stopped to read - this is a keeper. Alison |
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