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Intangible (I am)
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Intangible (I am) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I am absent. I am here. Tell me, do you feel my fear? I'm listening too hard to hear: "I see," said the psychiatrist. Absentia, and yet I'm here. I pretend that pretense works. I feel desire as I die. I touch me, and I startle her. Come to me, my little bird, fly and sing--rejoice your sky! Dizzy dancing in twilight-- I am absent. I am here. I know that cycles must be so. "As above, it's so below." I search for us, in my pillow. I think I try too hard and hope, I'll learn to let it be "just so" as I am absent--I am--here. It's hard to breathe in mandorla... Don't look at the map, m'dear. It is not there. It is not here. I am...intangible. * |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
O...M...G this freakin rocks! too many I wish I wrotes to quote them all... brilliant.  |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Always, always loved and do love your writing, my friend...intangible as it (you) may be.... j. |
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Osprey Member
since 2009-04-12
Posts 249 |
I do like your poems. Full of zest and zing and zurtal(don't look in the dictionary m'dear, it's not there. But, it is extremely complimentary.) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I owe sea an "e". She keeps m'boat afloat. j.wesley, is kin, just by some common geography, you're family.  and smiling at Osprey, vhat is zees-- "zest and zing and zurtal"? eh? I do like zees alliteration! *chuckles and kisses* Thanks all, for the loveziness.  |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I love your poetry, Karen. It is not like anyone else. Just unique and perfect. Ida |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
spectabulous...simply splendiforous |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I hope that almond shape is just from the words and nothing else.....I mean your call of course......(smile) Love this perspective sweet Celeste but you'll always be beautifully tangible to me. Take care and this piece is a wonderful heart release. "Just so" can be just fine. Eric |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*smile* You know I love you. *shrug* y'catch me helpless, every time! ty dawlin' |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Tell me, do you feel my fear? I paused on that line, thinking... yup, I do. *S* Then I tumbled gloriously through the rest... for an intangible, you sure do pack a wondrous punch. *S* |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
effective 'write' ! ... especially those of us who struggle with 'depersonalization'/'derealization' disorder likely will find the most meaning in (and 'connection' to): "I am absent. I am here. Tell me, do you feel my fear?(!)" applause for this 'penning' !! |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Amazing as usual, to delve into your poetic depths. Diver Down. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
K..... ...you know how I feel about your work. It will never change. One word outta you speaks friggin' volumes. You change language! I love you. (PS. Freyja is doing fantastic. I think she knows she's a goddess.) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks. I was really trying to convey that dissociative feeling that I get from time to time, so if that's what came through, then I'm happy. Kaoru, you're so sweet, I like to hug my old friends particularly, so just for you and the mini-goddess, an extra hug.  Now, if you'll pardon me, I have the sniffles. And at this moment in time, you can actually clear a check out line just by coughing and sneezing. tsk...evil, am I?  *wink* *laughing* |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Greets, m'witch I see this challenge is making another round I see, also, that karenity "is", as always, ever-ready to flash a glance behind the towel. I think in all I wrote, my most truthful words were written in the couple "I am" poems I did. hugs from the river |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You do know I love you, right? And chuckling...I've written so many of these "I am" poems, one would think I would be well-defined by now.  No six pack for me...gimme a suitcase though, and I am...so outta here! *laughing* Shaddup and write somethin', will ya? |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
*laughing* Actually, I AM writing.. I've been writing ALL of our elected representatives, local, state, federal) and telling them just how very disappointed in them I am. Gadfly? Nah, I'm just P.O'd at them lot of them. My new mantra is...."Re-Elect NO ONE!!!!" and, ummm, "Molon Labe" Red flags?....I guess I got me some (but I is protected by this tin-foil chapeaux) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Nod. I'm thinking of investing in a pressed-tin ceiling. (Low level electronic emissions, yanno) *chortle* and your goddess-daughter is turning 18, on MOTHER'S DAY. (She actually wants to have a creative party--making tin foil hats!) *laughing* Da fruit and da tree? Nawwwwwwwwwwww....  |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
You are incredible and your work proves it. Hugs, Rae |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Love this Karen, oh shucks, this is great  Speechless yet again ARCTIC WIND |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Dear Karen, this has me almost dancing because I love this kind of being and not being (while being on other levels of consciousness I guess!). You have just caught a great rhythm of existence. You are unique and always a treat! Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
hehehe -Juju |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Karen, I always feel like nothing I say can measure up to the poetry that I read of yours. In my silence - I am loving the way you use words, create feelings and take me to another place. I read silently. A |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thank you all so much |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Intangible? *smiling* I liked this, Ser. Love ya......jo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
so I lied. *laughing* I adore you Jo. Happy Mudder's Day. |
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