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Open Poetry #44

The Line is Blurred

Chalmette Guy
Senior Member

since 2009-03-11

Posts 1257
Louisiana

0 posted 2009-04-30 10:59 AM

In the veneer of another squalid day
It comes suddenly much to my dismay
The feeble attempts at self preservation
Have lost all sense of reservation
Windowless rooms inside the mind
Locked from within and no keys this time
The same dream over and over plays out
Its images from eyes to mouth to shout
The same thing that used to offer hope
Is now a loathsome knotted rope
A blow dealt from an unseen hand
A glass of time dripping sand
It still seems somehow so unreal
How upon a place you can so much feel
And how fast everything can be gone
No matter the memories that linger on
Something that I would faithfully defend
Of the ideal now lost that I used to depend
It’s over, it’s all over as the line begins to blur
In this is the one thing left of which I am sure

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

1 posted 2009-05-01 09:34 AM

The same thing that used to offer hope
Is now a loathsome knotted rope
A blow dealt from an unseen hand
A glass of time dripping sand
It still seems somehow so unreal
How upon a place you can so much feel
And how fast everything can be gone
No matter the memories that linger on

This touches me deeply... the sense of loss and despair is palpable... the angst is so poignant. When there is no going back, we go forward... even when we can't see through the tears. Beautiful, beautiful write!!

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2009-05-03 08:01 PM

How upon a place you can so much feel
And how fast everything can be gone
No matter the memories that linger on
Something that I would faithfully defend
Of the ideal now lost that I used to depend
It’s over, it’s all over as the line begins to blur
In this is the one thing left of which I am sure

That's very touching.....I was absorbed.

Eric

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