Open Poetry #44 |
Painted Faces |
Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
I have the biologic need To blister the skin and bleed I must fill the darkest hole I must give in and cede control To walk away from everyone Not be the center or second to none Avoiding the contact of humankind But craving the flesh in the mind Screaming to see if still alive Feeling the pain as it dies inside Dealt a blow with each and every word That my soul had never heard Protect me from the falling star Of the want that is no more I’ve been waiting for this for so long And now, the moment is gone |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"Dealt a blow with each and every word That my soul had never heard" ...this line shines...nice write |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Screaming to see if still alive Oh, wow... such magnificent intensity!! It pulsates with pain and perplexity... and is so good I forgot to breathe. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
steaven and suthern chose the same lines that I was going to highlight! Your ink is dark ~ and very deep. Linda |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Chalmette Guy - There is a poetic fatalism to this one from the dark side of the character, a necessity for introspection. I liked the macabre impact. Namyh |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Very intense writing. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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