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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
when mercy's hand with forgiveness reigns and joy salts it pleasure on bitter's plains so no grief grows nor harshness flows in basins fraught with regrets, nor hate bestows its soured jaundice over heartbreak furrows of despond to sow the saddened seeds of discord just beyond the mem'ries of discouraged thoughts and dreams so that that which is real is not as real as it seems as mercy touches with light affliction that which shows itself as soft addiction from a heart alive with grace-conviction and the ugly past is sweet-forgiven |
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Fizzle Junior Member
since 2009-03-21
Posts 38 |
the mem'ries of discouraged thoughts and dreams so that that which is real is not as real as it seems Bitter torments, they are. Forgiveness is a boon that evades me, but still, bittersweet as it is, it was a pleasure reading. Jaundice is yellowing of the skin due to liver problems right? |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
Steaven, I really loved this: as mercy touches with light affliction that which shows itself as soft addiction from a heart alive with grace-conviction and the ugly past is sweet-forgiven Cool use of Rhyme. Tracey |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
steavenr - enjoyed reading this, a little different style but well done... BC |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Fizzle, you captured the essence of it all with your generous comments...and you are right on the jaundice thing...nice catch...bear with me, as it comes from the liver (as in living life in this case)...I know, a stretch, but just work with me on it...thanks  Tracey, so glad you liked the part you quoted...needed to part from the rest of the write and wasn't sure it would work...thanks for noticing it Bill, not that I have mastered all the wonderful forms that exist, but sometimes, I just feel the need to depart down a new path...thank you for reading and for commenting... |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
as mercy touches with light affliction that which shows itself as soft addiction from a heart alive with grace-conviction and the ugly past is sweet-forgiven Steaven, wow, Really. This could stand alone. Heather |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Heather, Thank you for being so kind with your warm comments. I am so glad you found it to your liking...it is appreciated... |
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