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The Warrior Mice
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The Warrior Mice |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
The Warrior Mice The orange and gold of the dark desert floor did fade with the plummet of the Sun -and the red heat ebbed in the twilight -while the blue stars twinkled in the nightlight. -When the brown sand shifted in the moonlight, Two mice did run, run, run thru a deep, deep gully of an upslant hill over sand in the night sublime. -Their hearts beat faster in the lost light -from impending disaster of a fright night -by the claws of an Owl now in midflight as its wings sliced the air from behind. But as Warrior Mice hunting on the hot desert sand and designed for evasive speeds, -they flickered thru shadows of the night time, -criss-crossed the black road's white line, -confused the Owl's sight line bringing food for their young 'uns needs. And the orange and gold of the bright desert floor were the paints of the dawn's display -as the mice peeked once at the daylight -thru the sweltering heat that was airtight -while the sand grew hot in the sunlight and the Owl waited close of the day. Soon, sunset light poured its colors into night dimming day into indigo and black -on the sounds and the silences of evening -near the shadows of the forest life teeming -where the Dusk of the night is asleeping with a dream of the Dawn coming back. Then the orange and gold of the dark desert floor disappeared with the plummet of the Sun -and the red heat ebbed in the twilight -while the blue stars twinkled in the nightlight. -When the brown sand shifted in the moonlight, Two mice did run, run, run. Namyh |
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SeraphimBroken Member
since 2009-03-09
Posts 74USA |
I love this! |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
This is a fun, well thought out poem. Colorful, and lively, too bad for the third mouse. Nice, Tracey |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
Yep this was a good one. Liked this a lot. Hated to see it end. good things come in 3s CM |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
The dry desert where the survival of fittest theory thrives, every colourful writing.  |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
wasn't me, Wasn't Me, WASN'T ME!!! I may be an owl, but I LOVE mice (and not to eat). I love your poem, but just had to let you know, IT WASN'T ME!!! Smiles. Owl (a mouse -(and all animal)-friendly one) |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
SeraphimB – What scribbler of words would ask for more than that. Thanks SeraphimB. Namyh Tracey – Hope it made your heart skip a beat for fun. This was inspired by a program on Discovery channel. Amazing is the poet’s inspiration. Thanks Tracey. Namyh CriticalMass – I guess there is a critical mass we confront everyday to strengthen us, both man and mouse. Glad you enjoyed CM. Namyh PrasadN – Amazing it is that Nature’s daily portrait of survival is painted by the strength, resiliency and determination of the underdog not to die today. I just feel proud to provide the poetic colored crayons which help make vivid its vast canvas.‘Cause if we look real close, in the upper “right” hand corner slightly above the mice, we can see ourselves pondering that same daily wisdom. And in the upper “left” hand corner, there’s a giant Owl saying “Now what’s for lunch, mouse or man.” Thanks for your words Prasad. Namyh P.S. – If you see that Owl…………….RUN! RUN! RUN! OwlSA – It may have looked like you but I know it wasn’t you………………Was it? LOL Thanks OwlSA for reassuring us that you had absolutely nothing to do with it……………Did you? He! He! He! And thanks for your enjoyment. Namyh |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Hey Namyh, please don't doubt me, not even a little bit! Smiles. I adore every member of animal life that ever walked, ran, swam, flew, slithered, hopped or anything-elsed the planet or that ever will - but I have to admit that I am selective about the human variety, though. It REAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAALLLY wasn't me! Owl |
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