Open Poetry #44 |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida ![]() |
No longer strong, silently screaming. Needing something more than this. Yet, no one notices anything amiss. That thing that happened, the thing that cut me in half, it haunts me now hurting every time I think I might have a life back. I don’t weep so much for that as much as for the difference in me. Ruined, a façade of what used to be. What no one seems to understand is that it isn’t so much you that I lost or never had, but rather, all hope of feeling like that again. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Susan, I do believe I know where you are coming from with this . I've been there and had wondered the same thing, however, I DID come to feel that way again! ~ and may you, as well, sweetheart. Giving you a warm, understanding, compassionate hug, Linda May love shine in 2009!!! ![]() |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Linda, You are truly a sweet, optimistic person...thank you for your positive wishes (even if they do scare the bejeebus out of me). ![]() "too bad ignorance isn't painful" ~Unknown~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Unless we are made of stone, if someone hurts us, we inevitably drink their poison like a slow tonic at times, unless we are our own antidote |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
very powerfully personal and poignant! especially the ending: 'I don’t weep so much for that as much as for the difference in me. Ruined, a façade of what used to be. What no one seems to understand is that it isn’t so much you that I lost or never had, but rather, all hope of feeling like that again." 'Life' does have quite a way of turning us into stumbling along parodies of our former selves ... much applause for this 'penning'! |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Susan, life carries hope every day my friend and what you long will come to you I am sure, hold strong and believe, it will come to you. Rick |
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vandana![]()
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read ![]() |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Love the title and the last verse. Well done, very melancholic write! Eric |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you all very much. ![]() "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Susan - this is very strong words, very powerful writing, especially the last verse... BC |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Sista, I do wish I had written this one. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"What no one seems to understand is that it isn’t so much you that I lost or never had, but rather, all hope of feeling like that again." and that is exactly how I feel too, Susan~~ wondering "if ever" again. M |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You worded these feelings so very well and I think many can relate, dear Susan. These are powerful emotions that enter the reader's mind. But I agree with what others have expressed, life will bless you with more, many more precious gifts to lift your soul. Love, Margherita ![]() |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Allow me to peeeeel that off for you... ![]() |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
![]() Duncan! Any time! thank you for all the responses! "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Alison![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Susan, You made me sit here and just think about your words and what they mean and how they make me feel. I am glad that I didn't miss this one as I took my time of silence. Your poetry always seems to speak to some part of me - Thank you. Alison |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Susan - as you know life is so short and goes by too quickly. Many have been where you are, yet things will change, as they do... Wishing you that the best is ahead of you... BC |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
I feel so very sad for you dear Susan and if my good wishes for you bear fruit then the sun will shine again for you. Don't loose faith for we are all pulling for you. Love. Lindsay |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Sometimes something wonderful sneaks up on us when we least expect it and changes everything. Hope it happens for you. Interesting title. Ida |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
"all hope of feeling like that again." No, no, no. It will be again, I promise you. I believe most of us have been on this road. The out come is up to you. Your positive side has to show through so that one day when you least expect it, that special person will see the sweet side of you and you will once again be swept off your feet and held in great esteem. latearrival |
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