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Dog Junior Member
since 2009-04-09
Posts 48England |
The coldest dank summers alone Since my young foolish self cost me us A fantastical anticipation of a change of heart So tired from years of still-standing I still dream of you, my true sirens song A tidal repetition may sweep me back out Whilst mermaids massaged my ancient ego Stranded and beached the ocean moved on Black sun falls, your there in the surf Holding, laughing, so happy with him Who is he, that genius who knows how to love you I ponder his secrets from my dark sandy cove Fate has a way, we spoke once more Braced for your wrath that didnt come Your loose forgivness tore at my scars Beautiful woman how costly was youth Lacerating regret hounds me, lest if forget Leaving its lingering wounds of just deserve I wish you the world, i wish you a life I wish you my wish, god bless and goodbye Ten years on, this verse came along For a list so long, of where i went wrong So please sing along, to help me move on Not poem nor song, my soulmate has gone. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"I still dream of you, my true sirens song A tidal repetition may sweep me back out Whilst mermaids massaged my ancient ego Stranded and beached the ocean moved on" I loved this, completely  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A poignant reminiscing poem. The need to move forward is truly a heartfelt emotion. Welcome to Pips, where you'll find other poets who write the sadness of unrequited love. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
there is such a lucid melancholy to this...a sadness that touches the heart, but says that it must have been good to have learned such a hard lesson, regardless of its harshness...well written...nice imagery |
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Dog Junior Member
since 2009-04-09
Posts 48England |
SEA - wow thank you, coming from you thats really good to hear ! Midnitesun - thank you for the welcome, i find a lot of my poems are sad, i have been thinking about that since i came to this site, im still new to poetry and wondering if this is normal hahaha *smiles*....i do hope so or there may be no hope for me......? steavenr - your exactly right, it was one of the first stories i told with poetry so it must have needed to come out (yes a lesson well learnt) thank you for your compliments too |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
It truly hurts the heart , moving on is the hardest part Hope |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You 'sang' your sad love story very well! You have a fine poetic voice!  This struck a strident chord in my heart. Ofttimes we don't realize what ~ or whom ~ we had until it is gone...  EA |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Dog - heartfelt write for sure, well done... BC |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Who is he, that genius who knows how to love you I ponder his secrets I think many of us relate to this... I know I do. *S* And the painful truth is... the answer to "what's he (or she) got that I don't have?" is the simple obvious... you. *S* They choose... we lose. |
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