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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada 
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wondering where the mist came from seeping slowly I can hear the chords to their entrance was it always this quiet? softly softly, so there is no trace you are here for cover you are here to turn a blind eye at least a lack of sleep came with dreams I am plump with gravity and I miss floating do you remember my hair? strand by strand falling now so glossy, so glossy and so clean. at least a lack of sleep came with dreams. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"at least a lack of sleep came with dreams I am plump with gravity and I miss floating"  there you are! You go away for too long  I always enjoy reading you! Stop staying gone so long, I believe we keep having this conversation LOL stick around will ya?!  |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I love the gravity line. The repeated line about a lack of sleep bringing dreams-I like that too. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I agree. The gravity line was nice. Juju -Juju |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I am plump with gravity and I miss floating Wonderful poem... especially these lines! *S* |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
SEA's right, stick around more! I LOVE reading your work, anytime I see something new by exhale, I know I gotta click it and let it engulf me. Like this one. It's just heavenly, such lovely lines and feel. I always love your words. "Alone: that ain't the word, it's just a groan in the morning nobody ever heard" --Justin Currie, 'Gold Dust' |
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Rosie_Orange Junior Member
since 2009-04-20
Posts 46South Africa |
It reminds me of a broken heart... as if all hope is lost |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Waking dreams, wishful thinking....I felt a spiral in this, sort of the way one feels when they look at the old barber poles and can't decide if the red and white is going up...or down. Sometimes, it's just about filling a space, and I liked the glossy hair notation. It left such a sense of real in what is untouched. Great poetry! ~Karen |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
exhale - something about your poem that is intruiging, nice write... BC |
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