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steavenr
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0 posted 2009-04-14 05:43 PM



First, let me start by saying how I have missed you all here at PiP.  I have missed reading you all and I apologize for my absence.  It's been a health thing.  The doctors were afraid that I had had some mini-strokes and that it had damaged my brain, but tests have proven otherwise.  What it has done, however, is affected my ability to comprehend and concentrate.  So, here is my first offering after the incident that has affected me so much.

aloof

dull mists of pain
cloud the memory,
scathing the doubts
leaving the closet-doors of the mind

slightly ajar, barring entry
misting misconceptions
of mental meanderings
unsure of reality, relying solely

on smoke signals of fear
fanning fallowed flames
spewing ashen drift-dew
o'er furtive mind-fields

laxing reality
into imagery of
blanketed snow
burned from agony

blistered by confusion's
precipitation...aloof

© Copyright 2009 Steaven R Snow - All Rights Reserved
Robert E. Jordan
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1 posted 2009-04-14 06:02 PM


Yo Steavenr,

This looks very well done.  I like what you have here a lot.  It looks to me like you're doing great.

Bobby

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2 posted 2009-04-14 08:03 PM


I'm sorry to hear of your health issues...



this poem shows that your mind is strong,
I wish you well.

steavenr
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3 posted 2009-04-14 08:09 PM


Bobby,

Thanks for the kind comment...I certainly appreciate it

SEA,
Thank you...makes one appreciate more in life...good to be reading poetry again...I miss the inspiration to be found here...thank you, again...

unboundpoetess
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4 posted 2009-04-14 08:15 PM


Steaven~
So sorry to hear you have been ill, and hopefully this keen write of yours is clear and shining proof that you are on the mend.

Heather

Namyh
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5 posted 2009-04-14 10:14 PM


steavenr - Your word precision and vision clarity stand out here as indicators that you are moving in the right health direction. I am so glad for you and give things time to reorient themselves. Enjoyed. Namyh
Bill Charles
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6 posted 2009-04-14 11:38 PM


steavenr - welcome back to the blue pages. Your writing is with meaning, and I pray that things are going well. Keep writing, it's good for the heart, and the mind...

BC

steavenr
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7 posted 2009-04-15 12:11 PM


Heather,
from your lips to God's ear...thank you kindly for the generous remark...it is truly appreciated

Namyh,
precision and clarity are aspects I have been struggling with lately...thank you for the encouragements

BC,
it is so difficult to describe how good it is to be back here...my only difficulty now is the recurring aspect of this whole mess...not knowing when I will be able to write is the hardest part of the whole experience, though...thanks for the kind comments...will definitely take it to heart

Marchmadness
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8 posted 2009-04-17 06:44 PM


Sorry to hear about your illness but from reading this poem I would say you are doing quite well, Sreaven. Very well done.
                               Ida

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9 posted 2009-04-18 12:06 PM


There you are!!! My goodness, Steave, what an ordeal you have been going through! ~ and scary! Thankfully, you haven't lost your touch! ~ Even if you are feeling somewhat 'touched' after your frightening experiences!

This poem about unclear thoughts, was clearly written by someone with clear thinking! Am I making myself clear?

May you recover totally!

Sending my love and a warm, healing hug,

Linda



steavenr
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10 posted 2009-04-18 04:45 PM


Ida,
thanks for stopping by and leaving your generously kind comment...thanks for the concern, too...I do really appreciate that...

Linda,
'touched'...I like that ...my dad used to say 'teched' (not really sure that is how it is spelled)  One thing is so very clear...you are so kind and nice...always a pleasure to be able to read your replies (though I must confess, I like reading your poetry more)...thanks again...

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11 posted 2009-04-20 01:53 PM


And you were missed. *S* I'm so sorry about your illness... and so grateful that tests... and superb poems *S*... show that your brain wasn't damaged.

Heal quickly, my friend... but be patient. *S* Comprehension and concentration are always hardest when we're stressed... and the clarity with which you write of your confusion isn't just fine poetry... it's hope. *S*

rad802
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12 posted 2009-04-20 06:36 PM


Love your work.
Hope you are well.

Rick Delmonico

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13 posted 2009-04-20 07:22 PM


Sorry to hear that you are going through that, glad that it wasn't worse, and that you can still write poetry! and write it good!

~ARH

steavenr
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14 posted 2009-04-21 12:00 PM


suthern,
nothing feels better than to know you've been missed...thank you...I appreciate it...I'd much rather been reading poetry here than doing a lot of other things...

rad02,
am feeling much better, though still must go through a bit more...so glad you liked the write...that alone makes me feel better...appreciate it...

ARH,
always good to hear from you...thank you for the well wishes and the generous compliments...at least, still trying to write...now it serves as a feeling of accomplishment...so I will be writing...something...somewhere

serenity blaze
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15 posted 2009-04-21 12:34 PM


wow

and I have a couple of lesions, but ...

dot dot dot

they ain't legion, right?

"slightly ajaz, barring entry"

I just wanna wink and hug you tight.

I have my moments. May one of mine meet one of yours...

I'll be the one wearing White Linen.


LindsayP
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16 posted 2009-04-21 01:01 AM



Welcome back my friend, I know every one of us has missed you on PIP. I am genuinely

sorry that you have had some health problems but when I read your great poem, I

thought, there is nothing wrong with Steave thinking. A  great poem mate and all the best for the future.

Lindsay

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