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He doesn't know he's here
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He doesn't know he's here |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
Hungry hand me downs listen to a sermon meant for those who have silver for the plate full bellies and wing-tip shoes "God can see all the children, they shine bright- like stars in the night sky. Jesus loves and watches over them." Amen He is seven going on sixteen, waiting for a gaze that never comes. They aren't shiny enough for God to see. Daddy knows the truth. There is no God. Momma prays, irons neighbors clothes, feeds rice to hobo's on the front step. Red, green and blue food coloring makes todays rice look different from yesterdays and tomorrows. When he was eight he heard a sermon "God helps them who help themselves" and all the amens pass them by bibles in hand looking at the sidewalk. Little changes year to year. At eight he becomes his own savior. God lives across the street and doesn't know he's here. [This message has been edited by critical mass (04-13-2009 05:46 AM).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
When he was eight he heard a sermon "God helps them who help themselves" and all the amens pass them by bibles in hand looking at the sidewalk. Your words fill me with gratitude that I grew up in a place where people walked with open eyes and generous hearts and lived their faith... So very many don't. |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
thanks for the reply. Funny how religion fits your needs. A friend of mine dressed as a homeless person with his two kids. They stood outside our church on the lawn. No one spoke to them. Very few even acknowledged they were there. They were escorted off the property by the police. I got it on video. The church now helps the homeless in our area. Some people just don't want to know or care. |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
I imagine the next service after that happened was interesting. I read a hopeless kind of empty here. Evocative. Heather |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
not all people who go to church are as uncaring, but too many unfortunately, are. this is good... |
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Osprey Member
since 2009-04-12
Posts 249 |
From my understanding of religion, gods can only operate through their creations: if the brain can't move the hand, the nose ain't getting scratched. At eight years of age, someone got very wise to this. There's no hiding place for hypocrisy when there's a hidden camera in action. A thought-provoking, nicely-delivered poem that almost becomes a parable, when read together with your first reply. Thank you. |
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Dog Junior Member
since 2009-04-09
Posts 48England |
interesting thoughts, thats a good write, like Heather said i bet the following service was interesting after that incident ? |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
critical mass - I've enjoyed your writings, and hope to see more of them... BC |
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Boshii2 Member
since 2009-02-01
Posts 146 |
loved each and every word love your church also but of course your church is you. Kind regards Boshii2 |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
unboundpoetess Actually I mailed it to the church. It took two weeks. Didn't want them to know it was me. SEA You are right, not all are, but in a southern Mississippi town things are different. Osprey You are right, God was never really what this poem was about. Dog It was interesting. Bill Charles coming soon to a theater near you. Boshii2 glad you liked this. I'll let the church know. Thank you all for you kind replies. CM |
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