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Long Brown Coat |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. Wind moves As it never has The willow’s leaves The tips of whose branches Are like fingers brushing The surface of a still pool Isn’t there now Someone humming In a distance not far away An old Celtic tune softly About beauty young love And home A romantic heart That’s not yet dead Always has this need To flesh a void To fill With stars and flowers Other symbols magical Any empty space Within its cloth And you—my yet Sensuous anonymous Still absent any Fact or experience That might dispel The myth Of tints and shades I’ve made in which You now reside Never take it off . |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This has an ethereal quality to it, beautiful. Ida |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oh, I like this. You evoke the dream I no longer dream. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
i like the whole poem but this i like best "A romantic heart That’s not yet dead Always has this need To flesh a void To fill With stars and flowers Other symbols magical Any empty space Within its cloth And you—my yet Sensuous anonymous Still absent any Fact or experience That might dispel The myth Of tints and shades I’ve made in which You now reside Never take it off" |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Thank you all Helen, The trick is knowing that it's only you that's doing it. Thanks all again, John . |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Even if I am accused of ‘bias’ [as a person of v. proud Celtic ancestry (and an unabashedly ‘incurable Romantic)] … I simply must say THIS is the absolute best of your work that I have read to date! … I will not ‘hi-lite’ a specific part … as it is grand-fine from beginning to end! Resounding/long-sustained applause for this wonderful ‘penning’ !! |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Bruce: "I simply must say THIS is the absolute best of your work that I have read to date! …" That's high praise . . . I will keep it in mind when I'm deciding what to submit to the Illinois State Poetry Society for their website in May, (XIV was for March), Thanks again I will not forget John |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
That opening alone is worth an applause, John. A wonderfully written piece, with superb imagery. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
A romantic heart That’s not yet dead Always has this need To flesh a void To fill With stars and flowers Other symbols magical Any empty space Within its cloth How very true... how magnificently written! |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
This piece of beautiful would have my vote for your Poetry Society. There is not a single line that I didn't love here. Absolutely stunning. Heather |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"A romantic heart That’s not yet dead Always has this need.." ah, then my heart is not dead as I suspected. Well done. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
I would like to see this superb 'penning' return, for awhile at least, near the top of the "P.I.P.-land queue! continuing applause for this 'write' !! |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Well Bruce, You've pretty much made it a moral obligation for me to post it as my submission to the Illinois State Poetry site, and I will dedicate to you. Thanks John . |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
I will be most honored by said dedication! I hope this poem does very well [it (and you) assuredly deserve major recognition] |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
you have unveiled for us sheer beauty....nice |
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