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Against the Tide ( a villanelle inspired by Nan's poetry and writers blog) |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
One voice alone can make him yield The tide of knowledge never crests Resolved, and thus his fate is sealed By oceans vast or far afield The seeker shall be put to test One voice alone can make him yield To all rebuffs his will's been steeled These are the truths for which he quests Resolved, and thus his fate is sealed A testament to those revealed May oft' proceed as one possessed One voice alone can make him yield To see with eyes that pierce the shield Which hand upon his shoulder rests Resolved, and thus his fate is sealed Ambition's often ill concealed As words as these may well suggest One voice alone can make him yield Resolved, and thus his fate is sealed |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You've nary gone one bit afield Your poems always pass the test One beat for field and one for yield! (unless it's afield, of course)  Nan's Morsels Writers' Blog |
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varun Junior Member
since 2009-04-05
Posts 13Punjab,India |
Well written with emotions |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Nan, Thank you for your poetic reply. I enjoyed the challenge. Now just for kicks, I think I'll pen something with two syllable yields and fields. Lol. Doc varun, Thank you for your reply. Welcome to Passions |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
An enjoyable read Dr, you wrote it well. Enjoyed. Lindsay |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
LindsayP, Thanks for the reply. The more structured forms are quite a challenge and consequently I'm not always that pleased with the results. This would be one of those, it fits the form, follows all the rules, and still comes up short. Oh well, practice, practice, practice. Doc |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Dr. Moose, I love villanelles. Although, I haven't gotten it down pat, yet. But, I see you are a pro. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I tip my 'halo' to you! lol  Writing a Villanelle is no easy matter! Trying to write a poem in that form, is like trying to follow a very complicated recipe! ~ They both drive me to pull my ebony tresses out!  You've done a masterful job, here, Doctor! Love & Poet Light, EA  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Oklahoma Rose, Thanks for the r&r. Doc EA, Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. Doc |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Doc Moose, You - okay, I'll just applaud and save the gushing for another day. Wonderful! Alison |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
very nice...very nice, indeed...loved it |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Wow! This is good Doc. I don't thnk I'll try that at home. I might hurt myself. Ida |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Doc, I loved this!! Really beautifully done... "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
One voice alone can make him yield Resolved, and thus his fate is sealed... So true I love form and you do it so well! M |
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