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A Bird's Eye View...duet with Mark Bohannan
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A Bird's Eye View...duet with Mark Bohannan |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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I was standing on a mountain top Watching a goldfinch get in tune Flittering across a cotton crop Serenading to the heart of noon Twilling winged the lazy tiers Counting the minutes slowly taken For its song to reach my ears As the opening day awakened The feet of nutrition hung in vines Sweeping aside leaves in decay On the horizon of towering pines White-tail fed in a cautious array Then geese took wing in colored air Creasing the clouds of mauve with morning Loudly proclaiming the sky as theirs Ringing my ears with jubilant storming A redtail gave massage to sky In circles precise to hunger pain Menu of rabbit captured in eye Awaiting the feast of talon's claim The wind rang leaves in the trees below To thermal freeways gave direct blast A hawk in lazy circles drove Considering the ground for break of fast ----------- Thanks Mark, for the inspiration to write in rhyme and meter with such an excellent example of how to.  |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
awesome !!! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
A redtail gave massage to sky In circles precise to hunger pain What a wonderful tribute to our feathered friends... I love the perspective! *S* The two of you fly well together... beautiful work! *S* |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
The feet of nutrition hung in vines Sweeping aside leaves in decay On the horizon of towering pines White-tail fed in a cautious array I loved it! Duets are my absolute favorites. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
1slick_lady - Thank you much. Ruth - The views can't be beat from the top of the mountains and to be able to see it from a hawk's view would be awesome. Thank you dearly and Martie makes it easy to soar when it comes to the pen. Mysteria- So glad you enjoyed and I do love to duet when you have the right partner. Thank you for the visit and apprectiation. ***Martie*** - Thank you dear friend for allowing me to duet with you again after so many years. It is always a pleasure and a treat to be able to mix words and worlds with you. I am honored. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Great heights, great minds. Thank you both for sharing this vision. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Man, this is so well written and the rhyme scheme is wonderful. Leave it to you two, a couple of the finest poets I have ever read. There's such beauty entwined with the reality of nature in this and that's not always easy to do. BRAVO!! Eric This intro captured me right away. "I was standing on a mountain top Watching a goldfinch get in tune Flittering across a cotton crop Serenading to the heart of noon" I was hooked. |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
good job especially like the last 3 words, took me a minute though. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This duet is magical, in imagery and sound. I have a special fondness for birds, but an even greater fondness for two of the all-time best of Passion's poets! Fantastic, Martie and Mark!!! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A truly refined co-creation, dear Martie and Mark! You take us to true heights ... Love, Margherita |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thanks poet friends...Mark got this started and I just followed his lead. Thanks, Mark. |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
This has a beautiful flow...the type of poem one can gladly read aloud. I especially liked the last stanza as well. ~*Krista Botterill*~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
This is an excellent duet by you too!! ~ Wonderful ARCTIC WIND |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Serenading to the heart of noon ~*~ This was the beginning of a cascade down a waterfall of well-written thoughts with imagery that went sky high. Well done! |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
yeah, what Kari said! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
A duet with two of my favorite writers AND one of my favorite topics? What a wonderful treat for breakfast this morning! Loved this you two ... seamless collaboration, much enjoyed! Best wishes and hugs to you both, /Kit |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
M&M! sweet!  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Dark Star Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392Lost in your eyes |
I liked it |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Thank you all very much. It is always a pleasure to duet with Martie and I as I am sure she is ... appreciate all the wonderful comments and reads. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
 love this....~~**~~ |
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