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noah j
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on the open road with the wind blowing in my hair

0 posted 2009-04-04 01:44 AM



i remember folding my laundry
in my dorm room
putting it all away
with the grateful dead’s “touch of gray” playing on the radio
t-shirts went neatly folded in the first drawer
blue jeans in the second
boxers and socks stuck wherever
i don’t remember what she said or wore
or why she was mad at me
i just remember her sitting on my naked bed
then before she left me for good
her helping me put the fitted sheet on
because after getting washed the sheet was always  a little smaller
than the bed

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Boshii2
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1 posted 2009-04-04 11:07 AM


simply  wonderful


...always we remember how they made us feel  and rarely what they said...
you made me feel  the bewilderment too

suthern
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2 posted 2009-04-04 12:10 PM


bewilderment... exactly... why things don't work the way they should. *S*

I enjoyed this very much!

Midnitesun
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Gaia
3 posted 2009-04-04 02:23 PM


A vivid life-snippet.
I have the same sheet problems!

ethome
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4 posted 2009-04-04 06:29 PM


Yep, the things that linger in the memory room.
Nice play off the title I enjoyed how you worked it in.
Enjoyable read.

Eric

Margherita
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Eternity
5 posted 2009-04-05 06:07 PM


Dear Noah, you well succeeded in sharing the emotion of this life changing moment.

Very touching.

Love,
Margherita

JamesMichael
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6 posted 2009-04-07 08:35 PM


Wonderful...James
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