Open Poetry #44 |
Indiana |
Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. The dawn sun Casts a blue glow On green lawns Dew glistens On summer grasses— Small squirrels are silently Leaping from tree to tree And birds are beginning To sing There is this Curious indifference In the animal world As it goes about Treating as no more Than impediments Walls and fences Those white sided houses With their wooden eaves Shadows Shimmer and fade To the sound Of the town hall bell As if it had anything To do with me . |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
as usual ... fine impressionistic imagery ... I am particularly fond of the beginning: "The dawn sun Casts a blue glow On green lawns Dew glistens On summer grasses— Small squirrels are silently Leaping from tree to tree And birds are beginning To sing" AND: "Shadows Shimmer and fade To the sound Of the town hall bell..." sustained applause for this 'penning' !! |
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greytree Junior Member
since 2009-02-24
Posts 45Wales |
I spent much time as a child camping or on a canal boat and always marvelled over the simplicity of the countryside. You summed up many of my thoughts beautifully here. A great read. In such an ugly time, beauty is the real protest |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo John, I love this, in particular the last line. You sound like another city boy like me. Bobby |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Very nice. I enjoyed the gift of fine images here. Heather |
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Quiet Waters Junior Member
since 2009-03-13
Posts 15IN, USA |
As a born and bred Hoosier Lady still living in rural Indiana, each line of your piece brought me closer to the beauty that many from more "exotic" lands tend overlook. Indiana really is a beautiful state.... ) |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I've never been to Indiana but this poem makes me wish I had. Ida |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
just beautiful and very inspiring. Thanks yann |
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