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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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He retracted big bear claws and held my face in padded paws to force my eyes direct within the gentle fierce of passion's hymn rumble-throat and cushioning a tumble and a big bear ghost in the imprint of the snow like an angel I had known and never, none shall know again. He told me that he loves me, so, I'll never need to trust the men who tracked my hooves deep in the grim sin of frost of meagering buried in the meat of glen where berries, in the spring, grow wild and quibbles of the leaflets spend the harvest in the spiral growth leaflings yellowing the sprigs nibbled delicate, as though I might not ever see my own belly growing tight again and so I leave the blooms alone foraging with common sense. My legs are twigs of shivering stopping only for a twist of my neck, compassionate, wishing for a trace of his hands caressing my deer face offering release, and grace of the cornucopia and flakes of snow upon my nose and shakes: faceinhands and totem's lace watering my tongue... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"foraging with common sense." Yep, that's what keeps us out of the brambles. A very special write, lady K. |
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Dark Star Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392Lost in your eyes |
nice write S |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You bring emotion, dear Karen, because you render your own emotions so masterfully. Thank you. Love, Margherita  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
My legs are twigs of shivering stopping only for a twist of my neck, compassionate, wishing for a trace of his hands caressing my deer face offering release, and grace Sometimes, the world stops its spin so that words can be savored... or maybe that was just my breath stopping. Magnificent!!! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Karen, I LLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVEEEEEEEEEEEEE this and if you weren't so damn clever, I would think that you couldn't know how much, but I know better than that! You will also not be surprised that I am emerald green with envy! Owl |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
You do know what to say and how to say it, Karen Ida |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Someone saved my life that night... exhaling contentment bear hugs for everybody!  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thank you james... this one is special to my heart. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"My legs are twigs of shivering" would you PLEASE just publish already |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Helen? Y'think it's okay if I write something for money?  It probably won't work that way, huh? Good Goddess, but I do love you...  And I'm happy...I just wish I could shrug off the money thing, like Forrest Gump: "One less thing to worry 'bout." And I can't believe we're expecting a crowd of thirty thousand people here for Jazz Fest and you're not one of 'em.  *kisses* |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
my soul...this is like watching one of the great masters pour out his soul on canvas, only later to hit me over the head with that same masterpiece...wow...and that's only what I says when words fail me...and having read this...they do |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
My minds eye sees a wise old tribe leader, sitting with his elders around a slow smoking campfire and speaking low and calm of his visions. this is such a cool write. Much enjoyed. Tracey. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
stevenr summed it up pretty darn good. I love your poetic slices of life. When I first read it I thought it was about your brother. Carpe' Diem, |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Y'all took what I was going to say, pffff  to you KarenARCTIC WIND |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
great use of a metaphor. Great use of words and images. |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Karen that was a real delight to read my dear, a real gem, thanks for sharing. Lindsay |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
::gulp:: I mean ::smiles:: You do have a way with you. and the pic... Oh my ! I don't recall Joanne Worley being so HOT ! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You certainly do have a way of making me/we/us work hard to get the drift of it.... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I don't mean to be difficult.  and I am laughing at the JoAnn Worley thing, Uriah. Perhaps we should put our pics together, and do a small spin on the match.com. *cracking up* I think it would be hilarious! Think about that one, will ya? And thanks everyone for reading.  |
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