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critical mass
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0 posted 2009-03-27 10:07 AM



When first I saw his spots
like flags
flash across cut corn
someday I thought I might just hang
a trophy of November.

Two years have passed
and from my car  
binoculars are scanning
I spot his spikehorns flailing shrubs
a winner this November.

Three Augusts pass
and now he spars
with brothers and with cousins
with summers end, his neck balloons
fight swells up in November.

Six Junes have warmed
his meadow home
he king-struts springs alfalfa
haunch muscles flexing dominance
testosterone through November.

Twelve seasons mourn
his snowy tracks
but mostly I remember
Decembers chill came earlier
the day I killed November.

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Boshii2
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1 posted 2009-03-27 01:32 PM


yes, you are good!
reminds me of a son who playfully shot an arrow and killed a  stork.... for the next 10 years at least the lonely partner sat in the  branches of a dead ghost-gum tree.....they only ever take one mate.Kind regards Boshii2

unboundpoetess
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2 posted 2009-03-27 05:12 PM


I shared this with my father and my oldest son, as they are both dedicated outdoorsmen.  

Enjoyed this.

Heather

critical mass
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3 posted 2009-03-27 07:12 PM


boshii2
thanks for the reply. I didn't know that about storks. Learn something everyday.

unboundpoetess
thanks for the reply, hope your dad and son liked it also.



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4 posted 2009-03-29 02:15 AM


I wish November would never die.  I eat moose - but, I am a tree-huggin'-Disney-animal-movie-cryin'-kind of woman.

Good poem
A

critical mass
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5 posted 2009-03-29 06:46 AM


Alison

Sorry about the ending.

Twelve seasons mourn
his snowy tracks
but mostly I remember
Decembers chill came early
when Walt Disney signed November.

unboundpoetess
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6 posted 2009-03-29 11:35 AM


whahahahaha!

sorry, I read your comment to Alison and laughed until I cried!

I hope she liked her special ending.

Heather

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7 posted 2009-03-29 11:51 AM


November remains hungry and nobel, since sired was the future of infinite Decembers.
The way of nature reminds us to look, think, drink and move to the warmth of springs coming.  You inspire.
Enjoyed.

passing shadows
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8 posted 2009-03-29 12:30 PM


wow

I do love this!

critical mass
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9 posted 2009-03-29 07:28 PM


unboundpoetess

ThisDiamond

passing shadows

Thank you all for the comments.

hunting has its down sides.


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10 posted 2009-03-30 03:31 PM


I come from a family of hunters... and I was the sap crying through Bambi. *G* So I like the ending you wrote for Alison... even if it is fantasy. *S* You wrote the reality beautifully!
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11 posted 2009-03-30 04:26 PM


Enjoyed this!


ARCTIC WIND

critical mass
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12 posted 2009-03-31 09:22 PM


suthern
Artic Wind


Thank you both, much appreciated.


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