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Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

0 posted 2009-03-27 01:37 AM

Inner whispers
run around my head,
bouncing off the walls
of the private little universe
that sits on my shoulders.
I have been listening intently
to the soft murmur
of inspiration.
Contemplating notions
that tiptoe in and out,
forgetting
to close the door,
so that sleep creeps in
bearing a dream.

Ida

[This message has been edited by Marchmadness (03-27-2009 11:53 AM).]

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2009-03-27 09:44 AM

Wow, dear Ida, this is simply perfect. I just know what you mean!

... and if you remember the dream then the gift is granted!

Love,
Margherita

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

2 posted 2009-03-27 10:57 AM

My dear Ida Belle, I adore "the private little universe that sits on (your) shoulders." ~ for from it comes some mighty intriguingly creative and contemplative thoughts!

Sweet dreams, my dear sweet friend!

Loveya!
Linda

Dark Star
Member

since 2008-02-20

Posts 392
Lost in your eyes

3 posted 2009-03-27 02:13 PM

nice

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

4 posted 2009-03-27 03:35 PM

Thank you Margherita and Linda. You two always make my day.
Ida

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2009-03-27 03:37 PM

Thank you, Dark Star. I have been getting to know your writing and enjoy it very much.
Ida

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

6 posted 2009-03-27 03:40 PM

Yo dear Ida,

Yes, that's the way sleep works all right. It's sneaky.

Nice work on this poem.

Love Bobby

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2009-03-29 09:00 PM

Oh I like this so much!!

That little voice that keeps me awake never sounded so sweet!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

8 posted 2009-03-30 03:53 PM

The scene you set is absolutely delightful! *S* Well done! *S*

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

9 posted 2009-03-30 04:28 PM

Ouu Ida! ~ This is an excellent piece! ~ Wonderfully penned, very much enjoyed!

ARCTIC WIND

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

10 posted 2009-03-30 05:16 PM

a most fine 'write' ...

particularly the ending!:

those 'tiptoeing notions' AND:

"forgetting
to close the door,
so that sleep creeps in
bearing a dream."

much applause for this 'penning' !!

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

11 posted 2009-03-30 07:35 PM

this is a very cool write!!

Eloise
Senior Member

since 1999-11-27

Posts 1096
Wyoming

12 posted 2009-03-30 07:40 PM

An excellent read. Enjoyed this very much.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

13 posted 2009-05-25 04:41 PM

Ida,

I really like your poetry and this is among my favorites of yours. I am glad that you share those inspirations in poetic form.

This is a keeper for sure.

Alison

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