Open Poetry #44 |
The Suffering |
Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
The suffering within my veins Is showing through my ravaged flesh, The crimson drops of my heart's pain Are seeping through this torn wire mesh. Is this for all my deadly sin? So was my penance not enough? That you must pierce the heart within And so strip me of my true love? 'And the Lord God shed no tears for the creature of all sins, his fallen son. His armies stood ready and his hand held wrath for he who dared aspire. He who dared dream, he who had the presumption to create.' So does my life's blood not suffice As it trickles down pallid cheeks? Resentment has turned me to ice, But I will not kneel with the meek. She who crushed my beating heart, For her I will not lay to die, I will not play this tragic part, I will not sire another lie! A chorus of agony from heaven and rain poured in a colossus of angel's tears. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"But I will not kneel with the meek." that says it all right there! |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
I agree with SEA! ~ For Sure ARCTIC WIND |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Great, powerful write, dear Luke! Love, Margherita |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
So was my penance not enough? That you must pierce the heart within And so strip me of my true love? Such a poignant plea... moving to a positive ending... Well done! *S* |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
oh, I know it hurts, it is hard when we lose a girlfriend, or breakup, my arms, and my heart goes out to you for comfort today.... ~ARH |
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