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Unbekannte Menschenkind
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Unbekannte Menschenkind |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. The front yard Is certainly similar To what I remember As a child With its long green lawn The top trimmed bushes A concrete sidewalk Through the middle of it all The picket fence Is a nice touch And the leaves On the trees Shimmering in light I can almost Feel the breeze Yet once past The railed front steps Things begin to fall apart With broken fixtures Unpainted walls A fractured asymmetry To the rooms This is not a house I ever lived in And you never came home . |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
John, Your poem speaks eloquently of abandonment. Good work. Bobby |
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Boshii2 Member
since 2009-02-01
Posts 146 |
your poem echoes the fractured lives too many children live. the house echoes it too kind regards Boshii2 |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Nice -Juju |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Sad. A house just isn't 'home' if you are always unhappy there. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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