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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Tissues are tumbled around me Mute avalanche of agony Both black and white fade more each day I whimper in a world of gray “No more, please!” is my plaintive cry I rest my head and pray to die For such despair’s too much to bear And I can’t imagine repair I’m miserable misanthrope, Swatting away each buzz of hope God’s surely tired of my groaning But I can’t seem to stop moaning Like hungry hamster on his wheel I stay in motion but I feel Life is magnanimous miser I get older but no wiser Sighing my wails long past midnight I’m sure morning will gift its light And share warmth with a waking world - I’ll still be an unhappy girl. |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Wow, that's sorta dark for you I think. But good, expresses the thoughts I think we all have in the privacy of our mind in the night. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"No more, please!” is my plaintive cry I rest my head and pray to die For such despair’s too much to bear And I can’t imagine repair" I understand how this feels, even if I don't know the 'why' for you...I'm sorry you are feeling this  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Chalmette Guy: Not really... LOL I think my pen would perpetually wallow in the dark if I didn't kick its bohuncus on a regular basis. *G* I'm glad you liked, though. *S* Thank you very much! SEA: I'll freely admit I've felt all of this... but this is a rewrite of an old poem... and IT was written as an assignment in a poetry robin I used to participate in. *S* I didn't mean to mislead... sorry. *S* But thank you very much!! |
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Raindance Member
since 2009-02-07
Posts 120West Coast |
Perfect title "wretched". A place we all must go at some time, or even should go, just for the balance! And I love that you included "misanthrope", this is really good! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
interesting to see you in the mud..but then I imagine you clean up nicely when you put on a new day smile... |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Suthern, Hey, snap out of it. This doesn't sound like our Suthern. The poem is well written. Love Bobby |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"I whimper in a world of gray" Me too!!! But not today, thankfully. A superb venting, Ruth. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Raindance: I don't think I'd mind being unbalanced if I could have only good come my way... but heck... I achieve unbalanced without trying, just by being me. LOL Thank you very much!! *S* DS: LOL... The clean's much more appreciated when you know how dirty rags scratch. LOL Thank you very much!! Bobby: I've been up and I've been down... up's better. *G* This was written a while ago. Thank you!! Midnitesun: Thank you, dear lady... may your days continue to be bright ones! *S* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Relieved to read in your reply that this "was written a while ago". I don't like to think of our suthern belle ever being in a "wretched" state ~ but you sure can write convincingly of it ~ and very well, at that! Linda Lou  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
“No more, please!” is my plaintive cry I rest my head and pray to die For such despair’s too much to bear And I can’t imagine repair I've known that feeling...though I am lucky in that as soon as I am in school, the faces of the little ones lift me up.  hugs M |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sometimes it all seems so hopeless. This is a plaintive cry for love and compassion. Very nicely expressed Ruth my dear lady. I do hope it's not about you. Eric |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Emotions boil in this piece ~ Enjoyed very much, thorough indeed  ARCTIC WIND |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
suthern - enjoy reading your writings, you do have a way with words... BC |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
EA: It's all too often my address, ma'am... but I do keep trying to run away from "home." LOL Thank you so very much! nakdthoughts: They do give a brighter perspective, don't they? *S* Thank you so much! *S* ethome: Thank you, my friend... for both your comments and the caring behind them. *S* AW: Thank you very much for reading and enjoying! *S* BC: Why thank you, kind sir! *S* vandana: Thank you! *S* |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
suthern, Thank you for exrpessing that side that some of us just don't show all that often. It's kind of like wearing "Monday" panties on "Thursday" - we know they are out of whack, but the rest of the world just doesn't see. Unless, of course, we choose to show them - so thank you for flashing us. Alison |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Umm yea, sad to say I get this. You always shoot straight from the hip on any given subject. Good on ya, suthern girly~ |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Really Ruth that sad poem doesn't really sound like you but I did like to see that it was written a good while ago. I hope you are your happy self once again and enjoying yourself again. May the sun shine upon you always. Love to you dear friend. Lindsay |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
We all have our down days, Suthern. Hope the rest or your days are all "up" days. Ida |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Alison: I'm glad I wasn't drinking coffee when I read your response... snorting it's painful! LOL Thank you for reading... and for the best laugh I've had in a while! LOL Blues: Now if only I could learn to shoot straight AT the target. *G* Thank you so much... I'm glad you liked... sorry you "get"!! Lindsay: My writing's all over the place, dear friend... always has been, probably always will be. *S* And I usually don't post recent scribblings... even though I've proved time and time again that "aging" them doesn't improve them! LOL Thank you! *S* Marchmadness: I'm a yo-yo. LOL Thank you so much for your kindness! *S* |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Ruth, I am glad that this is an old write - especially after just having read your wonderfully deeply happy one about angels - but sad that you are sometimes as down as this. Huggles Owl |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Okay Ruthie,I had to find this and get my smiles as I also know you have "good ups" and sometimes downs. That's life. But you need Allison around you as we both saw her funny side. How wonderful if we could snort out the coffee because it caused a laugh more often Ha ha. love you both.latearrival |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear suthern, I know what you are writing about, the pen takes over and really it is our true thoughts, I have it so often, I write of being unhappy and in a dark place, my life really does not seem that way but under the mask there are raw feelings dying to be expressed, I think I will be pretending happiness for many years, changing what is could be worse who knows. If you are down, I hope you can pick yourself up and find some happiness again, or at least tell that pen to settle down lol. Have a great day, I have told myselve that I will, so I will won't I. C ya. Rick |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Oh Suth girl! my heart aches with you on this~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
just a hug from a sympatico...  sweeter than strawberries, I tell ya! |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
We all way through this path someday, good to read the responses too. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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