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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Here, I need to ask for help-- a rock and a log wedged beneath. Persistance, sweat, and graveling singing: "Oh hey oh..." is mine I am loathe to be complete. I am dancing to the song. I take the 'highs' of harmony and smile the flats of all our wrong. in time the tap-ta-tap-ta-tap de-dum I am merely only one whining in the high strung song wishing I were low... and Jung apologizing Freudian wishing for a lure of loose dancing in the dark chartreusse bouncing bottom zipping me as I let the play of juice yank the chain and sip the soup in the tide of beckoning: feel the tug of let it loose to reel it in by increments: a fat fish on the shore and flipped: flapping against measurement: There's something sad in it, dying in the grandeur of the catch in the ice and with the rest I mark it with a knife as mine as if I were a warrior because I baited and I played the bottom with the weights and stooks-- feeling nibbles, not conscious as I gave the line a yank hooking her mouth in sideways congratulations as I danced rocking the damned boat. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
You rock dance throw flowers in the spring for salty tears in a heart paper cut sting when all measuring is done and the last tear is drying you will discover there is no fear in flying |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
I enjoy your poems sometimes there is a pricking in your rose petals |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
you have a feisty spirit poet woman warrior and butterfly |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Anyone that can rock chartreusse in a poem is a cool person. lol But, what is a stook? |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Serenity blaze, Nice catch Hon. Just don't rock the boat. A nice big glass of tomato juice is good for that. Love Bobby |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I am loathe to be complete. I am dancing to the song. I take the 'highs' of harmony and smile the flats of all our wrong. You definitely rock, gal... both the boat and my imagination! *S* Love this! |
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tao power Member
since 2009-02-24
Posts 109 |
you're still my favorite. I envy your talent. this was another great piece. Who do you consider as your influences? |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Friggin great, as usual! I always read you but sometimes don't even feel qualified enough to comment, lol. Awesome. H |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh but I loved this part  and Jung apologizing Freudian wishing for a lure of loose dancing in the dark chartreusse Ever thought of doing a duet with Helen? Would be poetry candy I tell ya. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
With strength of a strong woman and will of a beautiful poet, yes, you can rock that damn boat! ~ Excellent write, and yes, an congratulations are in order for your wonderful write Karen!  ARCTIC WIND |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
First of all, (down there) is a picture of two stooks. They are bundled hay, and it's just one of those things we see all the time and never knew the name for it. (At least I didn't, and I liked it--so I used it.) In this poem, I used it because it reminds me of marsh grasses, which, by the way, if you see those, you might be in danger of getting your boat stuck because it generally indicates shallow water. And yes, that's a hint to my poem's meaning. So thanks for asking.And the lovely Helen, I believe we did write a poem together before--not sure if we posted it or if it was just fun on IM one night, but do trust I've been wanting to duet with Helen for a long time.  Dark Stranger, I'm a fan of yours, so a reply from you makes me very happy. Mish? You know I'm a devoted fan. I hope you know anyhow. I'm neglectful sometimes. Okay, a lot of times, but now I know you know. *smoochies* And J? the chartreusse is a fishing lure I've had quite a bit of success with in the murkier waters of shore fishing. But I'll bet you're aware of that little trick too. (and just avoid the rookie mistake of adding too many spoons on the line--the weight doesn't play well and I like to go for the redfish. BJ? Y'ever try to dance in a flatboat without rocking it? *chuckle* Thanks, doll, for peaking in. suthern--and one of these days, I'm gonna catch you while yer passing through! I don't know if I'm up for fishing quite yet, but redfish is one meal I don't mind cooking. (It's really hard to mess up a redfish.) yummmmers and hugs--I love you lady. tao? Thanks for giving me another chance. I tend to be edgy, and I'm not very likely to be voted Miss Congeniality. So I appreciate the generosity of your kindness. Influences? I'm a huge fan of so many poets--I think the Emily Dickinson is obvious, but Nikki Giovani is wonderful, but honestly, I have to pay tribute to the poets here at Pip that I have studied and followed around the forum, trying to learn how to utilize the tools that they use that I most admire. And smile--inspiration? It's everywhere. I find life incredibly poetic, even when it's harsh. *hugs, you* unboundpoetess? It's lovely to meet you, and as soon as I take a day to play at Pip, I'll be sure to return the favor of checking you out. And oh Sharon--you are a human flower. I love you. And I may be back later. I still have that inner ear infection, and it's starting to make me dizzy. Sleep sounds real good, but so does vegging out and watching some telly. And maybe a baked potato....hmmm...cravings. *chuckles* You people are the ones who "rock". Much love to all. *kiss*  And hugs for A.W. too. (got by me there) *smile* |
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Dark Star Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392Lost in your eyes |
I love this |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
a serene duet mmmmmmmmmmmmm |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity blaze - I can only imagine the feelings you were having when writing this. It's a great write for sure... BC |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I'll be over a little later to ear candle you. I'll be gentle you'll be happy. You shocked me with the stooks in this piece. Round and round and round we go where we stop nobody knows. You da bes girlie takes yer rest and come back blest! Eric |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Would you believe I've never tried to cook redfish? LOL Me... the gal who sends Christmas goodies to just about everyone who'll stand for it and some who won't... and who has the unmitigated gall to take even Paul Prudhomme's recipes and "improve" upon them at will... seems I still have recipes to conquer! LOL I was in the home state this weekend, but confined my wanderings to the western and central areas. *S* I did try to call you... you had the good sense to not answer? LOL Love you... and hope our planets will align one of these days. *S* |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Suthern, never did myself! ~ Although I am a cook in learning! I love to cook foods, and then eat them LOL It's like heaven! Mixing spices with foods, so fun, ouuu baking!I'm sure Karen can whip up a killer dish and you too Suthern, am I right?!  to you both ARCTIC WIND |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
wishing for a lure of loose dancing in the dark chartreusse bouncing bottom zipping me as I let the play of juice yank the chain and sip the soup in the tide of beckoning: feel the tug of let it loose to reel it in by increments: ------------------- Karen...so much charm hangs from the line of your lure. Dancing in the dark on my father's feet, what a treat! I'm always a fan. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
For Ruth: Redfish recipe: Bake (it's really nice that way too) but um, filet that puppy, and put some "Slap Yo Mama" sprinkles on it, and maybe a dash of wine, and dots of butter. (It's like..fifteen minutes, I swear.) It takes longer to chill the Chardonnay. A spinach salad, and omg...it's so romantic--what are ya doin' tonight? *chuckle*  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
K: It's 7 in the morning and I'm hungry for dinner! LOL Thank you, ma'am... I think I need to make some groceries on the way home! LOL *and my apologies for chatting on your fine poem* |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"Slap Yo Mama" i looked for that at walmart today and can't find it could you please send me some to Fla as we have red fish right out the back here |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
We have to travel a bit to get the "Slap Yo Mama" spice. But Sharon's son can vouch for it.  I'll try to make the next trip, though. And oy, Ruth...I used that exact recipe and I live a block and a half from the parade route, and yanno? Those who knew I had that stuff baking? They skipped the parade. I love my life. If I die tomorrow, don't be sad for me. I have lived lives. thank you |
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