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A Smile For Every After Life
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A Smile For Every After Life |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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I was dealing with pain, the first night I met her. I felt a melting on the air as we spoke to tell our stories at a party of mutual friends. Her mother schooled nodding head led the conversation easily. Above a long evening gown her words flowing effortlessly from a pale face long since kissed. That night easily marked the best time of my last two years. I haven't seen eyes I'd remember or really looked for since then. She was ex-wife strained, living in heart imposed exile just lately forcing herself from the past. But instantly her look showed her deference, open minded but struggling with divorce vibrations. Her heart well sheltered, she uncovered, searching within my eyes, my worth that was leaning toward her. I stopped and caught my thinking my heart leaping, I was headed into a world of pressing. The night and time were truly hers She'd climbed a wall and jumped from the past, a lifetime of work. The wishing for forever gone wifely anxieties pushed from her mind. Now here she was a shy divorcee her children and her ideals grown but always welcome. I loved the trance,the spell, grasping warmth from my fire. I inhaled her perfumed words, the spilling of her refreshed innocence cut through my stale heart and started my inner music. I moved closer, a lone searcher caught up in her positive pull with my negative world about to sail. The first of many dances she drew to me pressed into my arms by trusting choice. Swaying with my willing touches I pulled her closer and brushed her cheek, scaring myself somewhat! - she smiled sweetly and the feeling numbed my legs for a minute. The night now lost in fervor memories of past encounters filling my head. The heat of her breathing added an ardent swell to my open breast. Grasping to deal with the nuance of her, my nevermore ruled over by insight, an unexpected stabbing at conclusion.... "She's got to be special!" I pushed up closer to her blithe frame in her eyes I smiled to see her wish of want to cross forbidden lines. I felt the silly schoolboy, rearing in me so suddenly, my heart, strained to keep control soaring! Only we, knew what was happening, talking through the tall past We reached the border of vulnerability together. We left together laughing right past the astonished staring eyes. In the morning light I was blessed with her keen smile searching me, both of us still caressing, in the warm sweet spent silence the constant tangent of ripening love. She said sheepishly, "I'd almost forgotten!" and smiled that afternight soothing smile and that was six years ago. I'm still waking to that smile like a drink of fresh water, every morning! A smile for every afterlife! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
the next time we go to the same party? Say hello, why don't ya?  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You know I will...... Eric |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Eric, I would say that both her heart ~ and her body ~ were in loving, capable hands... I thoroughly enjoyed this 'reading' experience.   Linda |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Truly great story to read. I could see it all before my eyes. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
She was ex-wife strained, living in heart imposed exile just lately forcing herself from the past. From such vulnerability to the ending smile... I was entranced through every line of the transformation... Bravo!!! *S* |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Eric, There you go. It's nice it ended happily. Bobby |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
I'm still waking to that smile like a drink of fresh water, every morning! A smile for every afterlife!................" keep on smiling! ~ Memories will stay with one forevermore!  ARCTIC WIND |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Linda Thanks for the visit and I appreciate those words of confidence in that love. Always look forward to your positive replies they are so upbuilding. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Chalmette Guy Thanks for the visit and taking the trip. Glad you could see it. Much appreciated. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Ruth I'm so glad I could entrance you. I surely do appreciate those words and thanks once again for your visit it means a lot to me. Eric |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"her refreshed innocence cut through my stale heart and started my inner music. I moved closer, a lone searcher caught up in her positive pull with my negative world about to sail." Yes, she set the mainsail for you, and a love symphony began. Beautiful romantic write, Eric. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
ethome - this is such a tender writing, I throughly enjoyed reading it. Brings back a similiar situation, I'm glad you wrote and posted this... BC |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Bobby Thanks, glad you liked the happy ending. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
AW Thank you so much, you are right, they will stay forevermore. I appreciate the read and the comments. Eric |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
In the morning light I was blessed with her keen smile searching me, both of us still caressing, in the warm sweet spent silence the constant tangent of ripening love. Eric my good friend that is such a sweet sensual romantic story that you have written here. I must admit that the first time I read it, I was so relieved when I got to the above stanza and read that you have gained a lovely lady and also that you are both still together. thanks for sharing this intimate love story with us all. Lindsay |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Lindsay Those are nice words of recognition. I remember you saying in a previuos post how you and your lady have traveled the world somewhat and have enjoyed each other's company. I appreciate those fine comments and thanks for the visit. Eric |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
Eric, the shorter lines felt somewhat choppy; not only this added dimension to your piece, I also felt it actually enhanced it. A raw emotional experience, and a delightful one to boot Mark |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Mark. I tend to write these things in the first person and just fall into them. I don't possess your finely tuned poetic skills. I compliment you for that because you are such a willing student to the art. You have accomplished a lot. I'm simply an old song writer story teller guy. I do enjoy reading your work very much. In fact I just commented on your "Growing Up" revision. Thanks Eric |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
Thanks for the compliments Eric. What can I say, besides that this "willing student of the art" is reading your poetry and is learning lots from it? Indeed, You say "accomplished", but I'll say that I've indeed learned a lot since I've joined this forum. If I can add your straight-from-the-heart-and-to-the-heart of your narratives, set up a vivid scene with the economy of words of Bobby, and write with the soft, graceful elegance of Bill, then I'll be on the right way And there are quite a few others I should mention too, will take that up to the alley one of these days.And by the way, thanks for the honest critique. This is invaluable advice to me. Mark |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Mark You are more than welcome and I have always believed that a humble attitude such as yours is at the heart of being very accomplished at what one is trying to perfect. Lenny Breau one of the greatest guitarists that ever played was a very humble unassuming man. Yet, Chet Atkins said that he was one of the best thumb and finger pickers in the world. That's really something since Chet Atkins and Merle Travis practically invented the style which is very hard to master really well. I certainly wish you the best. Eric |
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