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An EveningLove
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An EveningLove |
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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india 
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================================ An Evening love ================================ Her eyes resemble the cloistered garden, sprinkled and ready to be played with; a garden seen through the windows, slightly distorted by panes. He softly drops in it; dares to pick the black rose though the notice screams: plucking is prohibited! Her iris spreads and blooms; engulfs and consumes him entirely; he cannot pick the flower he just drown himself in her prayers instead. Like fragrance, intensely it permeates through air. It is peace. It is God. He whispers. God is distant love. “I shall meet you right after the vespers.” He says. The birds are coming back into their recess. ------------------------------------------------- =© 2009 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar clever talks delay friendship! [This message has been edited by poddarku (03-20-2009 10:39 PM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Goodness, you have such a unique style and convey so much. I am always so impressed by your poetry.... a pleasure to read you, poddarku~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Wow, dear Ku, this is an exceptional write. It reveals a forbidden passion in a poetically unique and different way! It makes me happy when you come in here. Love, Margherita  |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Firstly, Kushal, in case you didn't see my email, please will you put a double line at the beginning and end of this poem (like the double line in After This Life Time) because it won't print out anything that goes after a single line like this one. You can only edit within 24 hours of posting the poem, so please could you do it now? Pretty please? This poem is more than exquisite. There are obviously 2 words missing from your dictionary - "boring" and "cliché" - because there is NEVER evidence of either in any of your stunnnnnnnnnnning poems. Double lines - please, please, please? Owl |
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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
This is awesome! I love the double meaning of 'iris' with her being like a flower, as well as her looking at him. Best I've read in a while, so thanks! |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
You have a talent to speak a mind of various different poetic characters. You also possess a wonderful tendency to describe a feeling or an emotion so beautifully, that it blesses pip with their elegant touch!  ARCTIC WIND |
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Dark Star Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392Lost in your eyes |
lovely |
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