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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477
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I stutter father bleating surrender the stones heaped bend me sapless beneath your branches make of me a beggar trembling in her rags Thirsting beside the still water silence divides these hands my cup pours anointing the dusty valley I wept to see her dry bones Lazarus is not here No balm for ravaged knees I cry in the light for darkness sparrows mock my frailty pluck the very hairs that were knit upon my crown smite me lamp black blind Ravening wolves howl impatient for flesh and still I listen waiting for the bush to flame to tell me why Zion is so far away |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
It's good to have you back and with such a powerful poem! A very impressive work with many layers. Love, Margherita |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, wow!! I didn't know what to expect from the title... but this is great!! |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Thank you so much for the welcome back, Margherita. I'm still peeling, I'm afraid. Heather |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Suthern- Thanks so very much. I appreciate you all taking the time to comment. Heather |
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angellea Member
since 2009-03-29
Posts 144NC, USA |
You KNOW I love it! :-) God hasn't forgotten you little lamb. Love ya, ~Maranda |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Thank you Maranda. So glad you loved it, and I know that you know. If ya know what I mean ;p Lovish, Heather |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
*wow* this is so amazing! I am saving this one to read again. |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
really liked this My favorite line. smite me lamp black blind That is quite an image |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
This one reads better and better with each read. I like it. |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
SEA Thank you so much for dropping by critical mass Glad you found something to enjoy here Chalmette Guy Appreciate your comment, this one was sorta tough to write ~Heather |
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Boshii2 Member
since 2009-02-01
Posts 146 |
fabulous Kind regards Boshii2 |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Read this one a couple of times and very much enjoyed the different levels in it. It sounds like a good cleansing of the heart and soul. I look forward to reading more of your works in here. |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Thank you bunches for the touch, Boshii2. I appreciate you taking the time, Mark. I hope you will visit again, and thanks. Heather |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is really good... I felt the despair. You're an interesting poet, dear lady. Much enjoyed.  |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
This reminds me of Silvia Plath's writing a bit. I liked the way the lines hit hard with intensity. Nicely written. ~*Krista Botterill*~ |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Ms. Blaze Thanks for the visit. I appreciate your time. Alwye Nice to meet you here. You wrote "Cycloning", of which I am particularly fond. Thank you both for kind comments. Heather |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I felt the desperation... really, really well done. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Thank you, Ms. Caldwell. I am grateful to be a part of this group of kind poets. Heather |
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