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unboundpoetess
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0 posted 2009-03-19 01:33 PM


I stutter father
bleating surrender
the stones heaped bend me
sapless beneath your branches
make of me a beggar

trembling in her rags

Thirsting beside the still water
silence divides these hands
my cup pours
anointing the dusty valley
I wept to see her dry bones

Lazarus is not here

No balm for ravaged knees
I cry in the light for darkness
sparrows mock my frailty
pluck the very hairs
that were knit upon my crown

smite me lamp black blind

Ravening wolves howl
impatient for flesh
and still I listen
waiting for the bush to flame
to tell me why

Zion is so far away


© Copyright 2009 Heather - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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Eternity
1 posted 2009-03-19 02:15 PM


It's good to have you back and with such a powerful poem!

A very impressive work with many layers.

Love,
Margherita

suthern
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2 posted 2009-03-19 03:22 PM


Oh, wow!! I didn't know what to expect from the title... but this is great!!
unboundpoetess
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3 posted 2009-03-20 01:13 PM


Thank you so much for the welcome back, Margherita. I'm still peeling, I'm afraid.

Heather

unboundpoetess
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4 posted 2009-03-20 01:15 PM


Suthern- Thanks so very much. I appreciate you all taking the time to comment.

Heather

angellea
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5 posted 2009-03-31 02:35 PM


You KNOW I love it! :-)

God hasn't forgotten you little lamb.

Love ya,

~Maranda

unboundpoetess
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6 posted 2009-03-31 03:57 PM


Thank you Maranda.

So glad you loved it, and I know that you know. If ya know what I mean ;p

Lovish,
Heather


SEA
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with you
7 posted 2009-03-31 11:08 PM


*wow*

this is so amazing!

I am saving this one to read again.

critical mass
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8 posted 2009-04-01 07:26 AM


really liked this

My favorite line.

smite me lamp black blind

That is quite an image

Chalmette Guy
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9 posted 2009-04-01 12:52 PM


This one reads better and better with each read.
I like it.

unboundpoetess
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10 posted 2009-04-01 09:35 PM


SEA
Thank you so much for dropping by

critical mass
Glad you found something to enjoy here

Chalmette Guy
Appreciate your comment, this one was sorta tough to write

~Heather

Boshii2
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11 posted 2009-04-04 11:33 AM


fabulous


Kind regards Boshii2

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
12 posted 2009-04-04 02:19 PM


Read this one a couple of times and very much enjoyed the different levels in it.  It sounds like a good cleansing of the heart and soul.  I look forward to reading more of your works in here.
unboundpoetess
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13 posted 2009-04-04 03:30 PM



Thank you bunches for the touch, Boshii2.


I appreciate you taking the time, Mark. I hope you will visit again, and thanks.

Heather

serenity blaze
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14 posted 2009-04-04 04:52 PM


This is really good...

I felt the despair.

You're an interesting poet, dear lady.

Much enjoyed.

Alwye
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15 posted 2009-04-05 08:08 PM


This reminds me of Silvia Plath's writing a bit.

I liked the way the lines hit hard with intensity.  Nicely written.

~*Krista Botterill*~

"Creating yourself is a spiritual act." ~ Susan Vreeland

unboundpoetess
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16 posted 2009-04-07 12:27 PM


Ms. Blaze
Thanks for the visit. I appreciate your time.

Alwye
Nice to meet you here. You wrote "Cycloning", of which I am particularly fond.

Thank you both for kind comments.
Heather

Susan Caldwell
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17 posted 2009-04-07 02:57 PM


I felt the desperation...

really, really well done.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

unboundpoetess
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18 posted 2009-04-07 07:07 PM


Thank you, Ms. Caldwell.
I am grateful to be a part of this group of kind poets.

Heather

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