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Salty Dream
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Salty Dream |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia 
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Last night was a salty dream. Restless wind chimes danced in a brisk sea breeze. Curling crescendo-waves crashed upon gold coast sands. In a midnight dream we floated in the warm Santa Ana winds over a deep dark cobalt sea. The full moon hid its face from our lovers embrace as warm amber sands shifted beneath our clinging bodies, then slipped serendipitously between curled toes. I awoke in a profuse sweat, salty air tingling my nose as I heard our sunset sighs sink behind the Islands. Where are you now? A sea of salty tears drowns lost love's painful reality, as wistful waves repeat the sad refrain, I was neither your song, nor your melody, but a solitary wave passing by in harmonic memory. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"I was neither your song, nor your melody, but a solitary wave passing by" me too kacy me too |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
good grief!! I love this... all of it, can't quote a favored part, it would be the whole thing! yep, this is a favorite.  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Helen, it was supposed to read 'note' but 'wave' just typed itself in. LOL. It seems most of us have been that 'wave' at least once. Thanks for reading. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Thanks, SEA! Salty dreams can be fun  Q to anyone? Does that last line work, about harmonic memory? |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Kacy, This is a welcome break on what has become a rather dull forum. Salty dreams are always loads of fun. Love Bobby |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I actually liked it very much and thought it fit nice with the ocean thoughts (the harmonic memory part) |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Thanks for that reply, Bobby! Thank you, Susan for that feedback. I'll leave it as is.  |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
**giggles* I had a little giggle from the title! LOL Enjoyed the write dearly!!!! ARCTIC WIND |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
glad you enjoyed, AWI could use a salty 'daydream' to kick out a sinus headache! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Beautiful, Kacy. It is good to revisit good moments of the past. More fool, him, for your not being his song nor his melody. You are probably much happier than if you had been. At least he left you some beautiful memories. Enjoy the memories, Kacy, just as we enjoy the poem. Yes, the last line works beautifully, especially as a last line. Owl |
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Dark Star Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392Lost in your eyes |
need one too |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Kacy, this is beautiful and give some measure to passion, I like very much the ending with the melodic wave that pass. regards yann |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
'harmonic memory' works for me...I like it a lot. The whole poem though. |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
I was neither your song, nor your melody, but a solitary wave passing by in harmonic memory. I wish I had thought of it first, Wow,, This is such a vivid poem, I can taste it, feel it, wish I was part of it. Can I go with you on your next dream? W. Tracey |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Now this wonderful poem brought smiles, dear Kacy. You are such a brilliant Poetess! Good grief! ... is the right expression! Dream more of that, harmonic memories are healing! Love and hugs. Margherita |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Gorgeous weaving of words. Loved this. H |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I was neither your song, nor your melody, but a solitary wave passing by in harmonic memory. Beautifully bittersweet!!! And the last line definitely works! |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Wow! Wonderful write, Kacy! Your words are still rolling around in my head - like a wave! Helen |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine imagery ... especially: "In a midnight dream we floated in the warm Santa Ana winds over a deep dark cobalt sea." MUCH (sustained) applause!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Wow, thanks for all these great replies! Maybe I should have salty dreams more often? |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Wow! I need to have one of those salty dreams. Maybe even two or three. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Lovely evening for dreams. One of your best Kacy, captivating from the get go! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Sue, I'll send you one tonight with twinkling starlight. Bluesy, glad you enjoyed this, so did I!  |
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