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| Open Poetry #44 |
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reading the poetry of others |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
writing swallows from the well listening to the bucket reach the top laboring incessantly at time's behest rope tangles, rises, but still it fell striving to bring it to a safe stop smiling at the sight of my mediocrity's best watching the sight of others' swell at the beauty of inspiration's drop onto the palates which do arrest the mind in reverie, caught in awe of the rivers of excellence I saw |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
You know, I do like the rhyme pattern here. I might take a stab at something like this. Thanks for the poem and the inspiration. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
yes, great flow here...  very much enjoyed |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"writing swallows from the well" ~ and you, dear poet, drink deeply!  Love & Poet Light, Linda  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
CG, thank you for nice appreciation of the form. A trilonnet is ABC ABC ABC DD and a madrigal is ABC ABC DD, so I guess it falls in between...though I did not realize that when writing it... SEA, thank you...I had to re-read it to see if I thought so too ~smiles~...your comments are appreciated Linda, thank you...should I confess that the first line was an accident or just take credit? Oh well, in that case, it was the result of hours of creative juices flowing... but, I do thank you for commenting... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
All of this is very good but the following stuck with me. "watching the sight of others' swell at the beauty of inspiration's drop onto the palates which do arrest" Very nice work. Eric |
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Noel Junior Member
since 2009-03-06
Posts 42West Coast |
I love these thoughts you wrote, you've expressed the feeling perfectly. It is wonderful and very special how the written words can touch us so profoundly. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and those rivers are rushing off to be oceans... *smile* You're such a nice guy.  |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
steavenr - enjoyed the read... BC |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
rope tangles, rises, but still it fell striving to bring it to a safe stop smiling at the sight of my mediocrity's best ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Yea that!! Always in for something special when I read you, steavenr. It's been a while! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Yes, this happens. Dear Steaven you have given these feelings great poetic expression. Love, Margherita |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sometimes it's hard to pick up on rhyme schemes like this and I wrote one myself years ago that people loved for the words and not necessarily the format. But the format makes it greater! Good job! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I've spent the evening reading the poetry of others... so this one means a lot to me. *S* Beautiful work! |
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