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Crystal Waters |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England 
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Crystal Waters Crystal clear waters A cool gentle breeze The quiet of the ocean Where life lives and breathes The rain starts to fall One drop at a time Then more and more To create a tide, The white water falls And kisses the sand Like the soft touch Of god's gentle hand, The beauty of the sea It is willing to share And gives of its life With love and tender care, We sit in wonder Of the mysteries of the deep Then leave it to grow With restful sleep. Annie. [This message has been edited by Anniepimm (01-06-2009 10:15 AM).] |
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Inspired-8 Member
since 2008-04-14
Posts 311Pluto |
Annie what a lovely write soothing and peaceful much enjoyed . hugs vic |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Thank you vic i am glad you liked it..  |
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Sharon Rose Member
since 2008-11-03
Posts 51 |
Annie, I enjoyed your writing of crystal waters. Well done! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Lovely warm and peaceful write...Very enjoyable. Eric |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Thank you everyone |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Anniepimm, What's with all the commas, why is the text centered? I'd avoid starting each line with a cap. Love Bobby |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
I am here to learn as well as write so i thank you for your comments, this poem was done i few years ago, and i center them because i prefer them like that not all people like all things, May i ask you why you don't center yours? your answer would probably be the same as mine. I am very dyslexic and i have over the years taught myself to write as it wasn't recognised at schools when i was younger, I was classed as illiterate, so was pushed to the back... And i have learned from patience and practice to write..  |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Dear Anniepimm, I always left justify my work, as that is the acceptable way to present your poetry to modern day publishers. Since I write for money, I try to please the people with the checkbook. Center justification is old and antiquated. Love Bobby |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Well then it's in good company with me as I am old and antiquated myself, Your very lucky to make money at it, I have been writing for 40 years and never got a penny.. Lets just say you cater for the masses While i please myself...  and leave it at that.. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Dear Anniepimm, I'll not bother to try and help you again. Bobby |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
That is a shame Bobby as i need all the help i can get, and there are times when i am totally at a loss about the right way to write, I was never taught properly how to put words down correctly, And i am self taught, which isn't good, That's why i value yours and others comments To help me grow and develop my writing into something to be proud of like yours... So i do hope you wont abandon me altogether Thank you for you patience... Annie |
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nourzihane Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 254Algeria |
Anniepimm |
Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England
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Awww this is nice.. | ||||
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