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Open Poetry #44

A Reason to Believe

Robert Frazier
Senior Member

since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

0 posted 2009-03-08 12:48 PM

Give me a reason to believe, and let me cling
Just a little less on faith, in a universe clear, and far
Show me a season brighter than a star
More perfect than any melody angels sing
Their radiant notes when captured bring
And give me hope by all that’s seen
When altogether sure and senses keen
Then simple truths like bells will ring
Unfolding into a glorious ending
And I will know with vacant doubt
That life within and life without
The truth is worth contending!

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2009-03-08 04:49 AM

Fine reasoning.

Nicely done. Runs as smooth as silk.

Eric

MeadowmuseRenewed
New Member

since 2009-03-08

Posts 4
Kentucky USA

2 posted 2009-03-08 02:37 PM

Hello Robert,

I enjoyed this. It has a hint of a kind of "tender" rap nuance about it, which I find most interesting. You may consider the possibility of putting it to music--not traditional "rap" sound, exactly, but a more acoustic thing...something soothing but with a non-mistakable, positive message.

I stumbled a tad with the phrase "vacant doubt" but only for a moment, and only from an objective POV, as I am inclined as well toward the peculiar word combinations upon occasion.

As a whole, your poem implies hope. That catches me. Thanks for posting it--I've enjoyed reading and thinking about it and look forward to reading more of your work.

Claire

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2009-03-08 02:41 PM

It seems to me that you are a beautiful seeker and you will find the answers and beliefs (within your heart) that will satisfy you.

Beautiful.

Love,
Margherita

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2009-11-25 07:39 PM

Hello Robert...a good poem to read on this day before thanksgiving, and I am thankful for the truth.

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