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jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

0 posted 2009-03-07 09:29 PM

Dispersal

I left a while,
I withered, browned, husk remained.

Sitting at a cafe table
rustling in the breeze of passing cars,
I tried to divide into hundreds of thousands of spores,
to be dispersed to hundreds of thousands of places, not one,
not one, a cognizant thought, a single feel . . .

Coffee fills half an empty cup,
long cold liquid chaining me to the table
opposite the chair that was yours.
Truck whizzes by . . . I close my eyes;
Dispersal, at last.

© wesley james beard, jr. – march 2009

[This message has been edited by jwesley (03-07-2009 10:20 PM).]

Noel
Junior Member

since 2009-03-06

Posts 42
West Coast

1 posted 2009-03-07 10:04 PM

Sounds like a truck stop in the middle of no where.
You set a vivid scene here and I enjoyed reading your work.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2009-03-08 12:48 PM

I'm glad to see you back, Jimmy. It has been a while but I see you haven't lost your touch.
Ida

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2009-03-08 02:37 PM

Dear Jimmy, this is quite impressive and poignant, as so many of your works.

Hope you are doing fine! You better stay here and disperse your talent and sensitivity.

Love,
Margherita

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

4 posted 2009-03-08 09:01 PM

"Coffee fills half an empty cup,
long cold liquid chaining me to the table
opposite the chair that was yours"

...I love this line (and not just because it mentions coffee--though that does help)...I can relate...I've been there with that cold cup more that once...you've described the feeling perfectly

LindsayP
Member Elite

since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

5 posted 2009-03-08 09:40 PM

A very poignant poem Jimmy, but is'nt great

to have great memories, Take care my friend.

Lindsay

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2009-03-08 09:41 PM

yes, indeed the same moon

and it's nice to see you, my friend

pontyjim
Junior Member

since 2009-03-06

Posts 40
Ontario, Canada

7 posted 2009-03-08 10:35 PM

yes! this is speaking in my language. loved it.

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

8 posted 2009-03-08 10:38 PM

jimmy i am soooooooooo glad you are back i have missed you

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

9 posted 2009-03-08 10:47 PM

I recognize the feeling . . . and the need.

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

10 posted 2009-03-08 10:52 PM

Yo Jwesley,

I rather liked this poem. I got a kick out of it.

Bobby

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

11 posted 2009-03-08 11:06 PM

this is a slice of life poem
i liked its casual tone

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

12 posted 2009-03-09 03:49 AM

Nice work very enjoyable.

Eric

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

13 posted 2009-03-10 08:59 AM

I tried to divide into hundreds of thousands of spores,
to be dispersed to hundreds of thousands of places, not one,
not one, a cognizant thought, a single feel . . .

Poignant and powerful... excellent write!

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