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Yawning
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Yawning today the sun breeched grays captivity so I ventured to the line of summer death I sat in sorrow by the flowers grave still aching in the casualty of the loss I grieved the moons that had passed me by yearning in the wants of absence here I felt free of the prisoner walls allowed again to breathe on breeze day was muted painted in a yellow pale the air around still colored winter chill then through tears I saw a tiny miracle it took a moment of disbelief for inspection a green that had somehow surpassed the blight yawning tenderly to touch the heaven I found my heart running hastily to bring a drink for this bone dry ground laughing through my tears I blessed it and spring baptized it the first hope "I'm so hard to handle I'm selfish and I'm sad." — Joni Mitchell |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Beautiful images, Helen. I am looking forward to that first greening myself.(once the snow melts that is  M |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms slick.. and are your thumbs green now? enjoyed it ms |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 I love this!!!Keeper..keeper. |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
ah You are 1 slick lady... and made me yawn. but... I loved the write ! especially the part where the flowers told you that they were dead. ::smiles:: |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
you have a very nice touch in your poetry letting the warm light come through |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
any way I look at this? I can't get the visual of you yawning out of my mind... truly lovely, and yanno? well. I'll keep that to m'self. But a gulf coast sky yawning? I sigh and  |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
H This title could be about the time change - standard to daylight - yawn. But it isn't, tho it is very much about time. I am enjoying this, even while I too, yawn. e |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I am so glad that spring is coming for you and that you are sharing your joy with us. Ida |
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pontyjim Junior Member
since 2009-03-06
Posts 40Ontario, Canada |
very cool. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Achingly beautiful!! I don't just read your work... I slide into the scene you set and LIVE it!! Fantastic! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I LOVE every word of this! Owl |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well I got it! I could see the sky opening up to be honest, and brother are you getting good or what at this poetry stuff lady!  Karenity knows what a southern yawn is don't you let her fool you. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"today the sun breeched grays captivity" ~ From the very first line, I knew that I was in for the 'yawning' of a bright new day!  Thoroughly enjoyed! May your spring be a glorious one!  Linda |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
...a beautiful description of nature's dawning...a 'yawning' to reach the heavens...nicely done...your word choices were excellent...didn't want it to stop... |
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