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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2009-02-27 04:48 AM

She looked like me
but better-eth.
She wore the brown-blush sequin sheath
underneath the suede cross cloak.
I noted that she wore support
hose and boots with heels and skort--

Her hairstyle was much like mine
except, I give me five points more
for knowing how to "scrunge" the wet
and use the blow dryer...

Interesting, to watch him glance
at me, at her, the busy bee--
she hugged me "Hi" and ignorance:
"My god but you look beautiful"
I replied that she was hot
feeling I was dutiful
as I took the stool.

"Y'gonna sing for us tonight?"
she asked me as she gave air kiss.
Not unless the gathering
of clouds pronounced us
as a twitch:
hisssssssssssss
and lightning--transformist;
like it had before, the stars
inbetween the cotton leaves
blooming like the fields
of dread, with the blooms of
puff and red, dripping off the thorn.

"I only sing when no one does"
I ordered water and merlot.
acapella
laughing glee
clapping for the fools who dreamed
wishing on the big rock star
singing off the mike and free
from the spot and from the mean
faces laughing, dancers squeeze
each other much too tight.

His fingers traveled up my back:
"You have pretty hair..."
I ignored him, clapping for
the girl who wished she was not there
singing absurd word for word
as they disappeared in air
while she hummed the tune, despair,
laughing when she was aware

she was not the big rock star
and curtseyed to the crowd's Astaire:
dancing tiny jubilee
with her itty bitty feet
tap-tap-dancing
dimple-sweet:

His fingers traveled to my neck;
he bent me to his lips to hear:
"I'm gonna sing for you, Otis..."
Redding? Try some tenderness...

oooh, I may be weary, yes,
wearing this same shabby dress

dancing dizzy in the dark
drop-lipping drool
my cigarette

showing off my thigh...

I lied.

"Try a little tenderness."

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

1 posted 2009-02-27 08:17 AM

"the stars
inbetween the cotton leaves
blooming like the fields
of dread, with the blooms of
puff and red, dripping off the thorn.

pure magic

"I give me five points more
for knowing"

you get 25 more
for just knowing
not for the hair knowing
just the knowing

"I lied.

"Try a little tenderness." "

we all do
and........yes a little tenderness

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2009-02-27 08:32 AM

I love you, boo.

I should sleep a bit.

But I still love you boo.

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

3 posted 2009-02-27 09:06 AM

ms serene..

you make my statues
miss your music

enjoyed it ms

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2009-02-27 09:51 AM

just be very very glad I don't sing

Callista
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since 2008-10-05

Posts 63
USA

5 posted 2009-02-27 11:58 PM

"..she hummed the tune, despair...." I haven't read anything better tonight, and I have read a lot tonight.

"The Moving Finger writes, and, having writ,
Moves on: nor all thy Piety nor Wit
Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line.."

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2009-02-28 03:30 AM

Another beautiful ramble from within your poetic soul Celeste.

"I ordered water and merlot"

GOD! I hope you didn't put them in the same glass!!

Eric

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

7 posted 2009-02-28 04:07 AM

oh dear Karen.. you always make me smile.. thank you .. this is a great write... and I'm with Eric... don't mix the water with the merlot hon.. not a good look! xxx
love and hugs RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

8 posted 2009-02-28 07:31 PM

awww....thanks guys and gals...

and there's just something about that karoake club I find inspiring.

Well, there's the merlot, too.

Thanks for the time and encouragement.

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

9 posted 2009-03-01 02:16 PM

quote:
singing absurd word for word
as they disappeared in air
while she hummed the tune, despair,
laughing when she was aware

Awesome! What an intriguing write, superb visuals and psychological depths.

Wow, you are a master with words and I am sure your voice must be hoarse and sensual to the right point.

Love,
Margherita

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

10 posted 2009-03-06 03:40 PM

and lightning--transformist;
like it had before, the stars
inbetween the cotton leaves
blooming like the fields
of dread, with the blooms of
puff and red, dripping off the thorn.

Enraptured... that's me. By your story and your images.
Envious... that's me, too. *S* You don't even know the depths of your talent, do you? *S*

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