Open Poetry #44 |
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In Tormented Beauty |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England ![]() |
I see her eyes water in tormented beauty, I hear her softly sobbing breath choke As I gently whisper in her ear words: ‘I love you’ I can feel the beating heart that they broke. Stripped and pinned down for lust’s cruel purpose, Wolves oblivious to her anguished cries As they ravaged the flesh of a still bleeding angel, Lords of sin, fevers, plagues and flies. As they finished their savage carnal passion play, After each defiler had played his part. Bloodied, numbed, shamed and torn as I found her, A sight to turn men to hate from art. So here we both lie in a still loving embrace, I can never let her see my tears, Bled empty and white by the comfort I give her As she quietly cries away her fears. [This message has been edited by Suncleaver (02-17-2009 10:34 AM).] |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Suncleaver, Never explain your poems. It's just not done. Bobby |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
Thanks Bobby. Until recently I've always kept my poetry tight to my chest, so I'm just not familiar with the etiquette. I guess I should just let the verse do the talking. Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Suncleaver - this write just lets it all out, and it's good. I enjoyed the read... BC |
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Alison![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Suncleaver, I am glad that you removed the explanation. I saw with my eyes the word pictures that you wrote - and I found myself leaning forward as I softly read out loud. That's what it's all about to me. Thank you for sharing. Alison |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Suncleaver That is a sad touching poem my friend, well written. Thank you for sharing. Lindsay |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
the sadness in this is an aching sadness, yet it draws the reader back in for more...nicely done |
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