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Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 1999-09-09 09:43 PM


Deceptive love dissolves and dies
Disheartened heart demands love’s proof
In deep despair I seek advice
Determined on detecting truth

My pride deprives me from the doubts
And dares me to defend my dreams
The night denies its role and flouts
As dreary star deforms and dims

My soul decays, drunk with depression
I’m driven downward where I sink
I dread the drama of obsession
Which only dreams and love could bring


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I fell in love and kept on falling

[This message has been edited by Master (edited 09-09-99).]

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Star Fairy 2
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 260
cerritos, california, usa
1 posted 1999-09-09 10:44 PM


This is quite lovely.

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"If to rectify your demeanor,
You must imitate another,
Your philosiphy on morality
Is a burden on your mentality,
Your actions based on popularity,
Will never fulfill you internally,
Cuz the world was not blessed with equality,
But rather with fake geniality.
--823--

Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA
2 posted 1999-09-10 12:39 PM


Thanks Fairy! I'm glad you liked it.
HCwildchild
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since 1999-09-03
Posts 55
Pennsylvania,USA
3 posted 1999-09-10 06:17 PM


That was very well done, I liked it alot. Keep up the good work.

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Heather C.

Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA
4 posted 1999-09-10 08:31 PM


Thanks HC!


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I fell in love and kept on falling

TrulY PreciouS
Junior Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 20

5 posted 1999-09-11 11:22 PM


That was great! I hope to read more of your poems that is as lovely as that one.

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Trul¥ Preciou§



"Live and Learn! Forgive and Forget! Take advantage in life coz life is short and it's only once in a lifetime!"




Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA
6 posted 1999-09-12 02:34 AM


Thanks I'm truly thankful for your comments, truly.
DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396

7 posted 1999-09-12 01:37 PM


Quite profound are the statements you tend to make in your verse and this is no exception. Well done.

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Pain is life, life is short, I will endure.
DreamEvil©



Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
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8 posted 1999-09-12 01:51 PM


Thanks DreamEvil!
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