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PaintGirl
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since 1999-08-12
Posts 4
Niceville, FL USA

0 posted 1999-08-12 01:48 AM


I wrote this poem for a friend.

Promise

As you sit im silence
Wondering why
I'll be your shoulder to cry on
until your tears run dry

When you've been hurt
And can't believe what they've done
If you need someone to talk to
I'll be the one

If a close friend hurts you
And you don't understand
Remember I'm here
I'll lend a helping hand

Burdens are lighter when carried by two
And I just want you to know
I'm here for you


© Copyright 1999 PaintGirl - All Rights Reserved
poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
1 posted 1999-08-12 10:36 AM


Very nicely said...keep writing! You have one lucky friend!

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet


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